A logical tale

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I dreamt of a story, a logical tale,

that's not for the weak or the weary, the frail

With summertime wishes now scattered the ground

and nary a promise that's made, can be found

To see every petal now gone from the stem,

where weeds have recaptured the gardens again

When feeling this good is a reason to cry,

like knowing the answer, but still asking why

I find all alone in the saddest of ways,

that the look that I knew in those tangerine days

Is still just as lovely as once long ago,

when a wink offered yes, with no mention of no

Where the mornings all glistened neath April/May skies

and whispers were lingering soft in the sighs 

As heartbeats all fashioned a comforting space,

so memories made, would remain in their place

And words, oh the words, that would glow every night,

in between starlit heavens and wrong versus right

To look back and see that it all was quite real,

explains in an accent, emotions I feel

For a gift once received shall be kept ever near,

as it's all I have left in my mind that is clear

And I, once a winner, am not ready to fail,

in this story I dreamt of, a logical tale

Reviews

[Kim S.]

And I, once a winner, am not ready to fail,
in this story I dreamt of, a logical tale

Amazing lines here, This is a wonderful write, love the flow of your poetic words.
very nicely written.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Kim. Happy you found this one to your liking.

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful rhyme and meter in your eight line stanzas will. You never disappoint.

And I, once a winner, am not ready to fail
in this story I dreamt of, a logical tale

When a wink offered yes, no mention of no

Wonderful story line will. So well composed and conveyed. Delightful reading on a wet spring afternoon. Have a great Wednesday.

Chris

[willweb]

Glad you liked it, Chris. Kind of damp here too today. April showers didn't realize the month has ended. Time for the flowers. )

[Ken Simm.]

Such word usage in this. Lovely language throughout such as tangerine days. I love it.

[willweb]

Thanks Ken. Coming from an amazing poet like you, that means a lot.

[emmajoygreen]

This poem has just about everything: the finest meter, emotions and thoughts displayed so succinctly. Yet there is a poetic wistfulness until.. those final near adamant lines,

'And I, once a winner, am not ready to fail,
in this story I dreamt of, a logical tale'

[willweb]

I appreciate your kind thoughts always my friend. Happy you stopped by.

[John the Baptist]

As usual, the rhyming is unique and the meter well maintained. I am not sure about what is being described, though. It seems to be one engaging in a bit of nostalgia for times past, but at poem's end we find that it is a story "dreamt." Perhaps, though, I ask for too many specifics.

[willweb]

Just some things floating about in my head waiting on the right time to fill the page. Thanks for stopping by my friend.

[Papaya]

Beautiful poetic tale that is full of strong imagery.
You do rhyming so well.

[willweb]

Thanks Ana and thanks for saying so. I'm glad you liked this rhymer. I tossed a little bit of this and that in there. : )

[Papaya]

Tossed like a tasty poetic salad. 🥗

[willweb]

Exactly but, no olives. I don't care for olives. : )

[Papaya]

Lol! Got it. Hold the olives.

[Writergurl]

A lot of feelings mixed into this wonderful write. Nicely expressed

[willweb]

Glad you liked it. Thank you

[Amy R]

What a magnificent write,
The language used is very descriptive which caught my attention for sure,.

I can sense it reflects on the beauty of the past, the sadness of the present, and the longing to hold onto memories that are slipping away.

"For a gift once received shall be kept ever near,
as it's all I have left in my mind that is clear
And I, once a winner, am not ready to fail,
in this story I dreamt of, a logical tale"
My fav stanza here... and it reflected heavily on to the experience of holding onto cherished memories while grappling with the inevitability of change and loss.

Twas written very well.
-Amy

[willweb]

Thank you Amy for your nice comment on my poem. I have a lot hanging out in my mind just waiting to slip out in a poem. This was one of those.

[Amy R]

I am awaiting your new poems then, you're very welcome.