Catching flies

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“You catch more flies with sugar,”

oh yes, that’s what they say

If even just a little bit

those bugs will come your way

 

But somehow I have noticed

as this saying I explore

You’ll catch more flies with something else

that’s rotten to the core

 

I sprinkled just a little bit

of sweetness on my place

And noticed that a few of them

were flying round my face

 

But when I lifted up the lid

exposing last night’s meal

A thousand little buzzing things

approached the peas and veal

 

That made me think perhaps it’s wrong,

this saying that they use

These insects may like sugar

but it’s garbage that they choose

 

Which made me much more curious

about these things they say

So now I pose the question,

“Who would want flies anyway?”

Reviews

[Writergurl]

This is too cute, really enjoyed this, put a smile on my face.
You are very poetic and creative

[willweb]

Just having a little fun with this one. Happy you got a buzz out of it. : )

[Summer Lynn]

Very clever and insightful. Makes you think. Impressively written.

[willweb]

Thanks again. Glad you found this one to your liking

[Seriana]

LOL, cute rhyme you've got going here. I enjoyed it very much! You're very gifted with your style and word choices Will!

[willweb]

Thanks Seriana. I always seem to smile when you stop by my work.

[FGFRANKLIN]

I enjoyed the humor in this, Will. I believe the metaphor refers to the old custom of putting sugar water in a bottle to drown the flies and applies in moral to being nice getting you further with others than being sour. But I don't think it includes drowning them with your influence. ;) Great write.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Fabian. I appreciate your kindness.

[Neville]

masterful rhyming as always sir will .. I can see there aint no flies on you are there .. Neville

[willweb]

Not at the moment but at the end of a long work day, there is no telling what you might find

[John the Baptist]

Actually, you catch more flies with an open garbage can than anything else. Roadkill's pretty effective, too.

[willweb]

So very true. : )

[Lydia Shutter]

What delightful musing! Those flies are not too smart, are they? I will take the sugar over the garbage any day! Your rhyming is super. Lydi**

[willweb]

Thank you Lydi.

[D. Mansfield]

Bravo, this made me smile, thank you for that.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Go to inland aust you’ll see many flies and catch em as you open your mouth to say g’day
Hope you are well
Enjoyed your write on the most annoying insect apart from a spider

[fallon]

Oh this is clever! and well written too! somehow you managed both.
I often have thoughts like this but putting those thoughts into such a poem is so creative and intriguing.
I would like fireflies.... what do they like?