wildflower

~

 

 

What if I,

came rolling through your pasture

 

Touched your hair,

like summer whispers on the breeze

 

You are all,

of every wildflower

 

As you take your bloom,

beneath the cedar trees

 

What if life,

were singing through your petals

 

As you bend your stem,

to reach your song to me

 

I will always,

look through greener pastures

 

Find your beauty,

a wildflower growing free

Reviews

[Vol]

WW,
Sweet imagery, I think it is only poets who can still appreciate the ideas you present here.
Vol

[willweb]

Thanks so much Vol. What a nice thing to say

[duff]

I like this Will. It just glides and reads well. Textures and all senses tickled. Nice work.

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Duff.

[FGFRANKLIN]

What a nicely sweet and romantic thought you have penned here. "You belong among the wildflowers..." Tom Petty

[willweb]

Thanks so much Fabian

[Oliver Covington]

nothing to say really other than lovely. good work

[willweb]

Thanks so much Oliver. Glad you enjoyed this

[William Michael Reeves]

This poem worked well as couplets. Almost like it whispered. Be sure to check for blackberries before you go rolling!

[willweb]

Will do...noted! : ) Thanks my friend.

[Betty Hermelee]

Freedom is a wildflower, comes up every year, can sing its own melody when it wants to, can wave as much as she wants; showing us her natural beauty through her petals;
still has enough room in her heart for giving us life....year after year
lovely Will
Warmly, B

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Betty. I appreciate all of your kindness

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Will.
Warmly, B

[John the Baptist]

Don't mean to be picky, but the first several verses seem to represent the wildflower as being very special, but then you say you will always look for greener pastures, which can be taken as you believe you can do better. I may be reading this incorrectly.

[willweb]

Possibly, it was not meant that way but I think I will change "for" to "to". Thanks John, That may clear it up with your help.

[willweb]

Changed it again. That hopefully reads better.

[John the Baptist]

Changes noted. It does clear up what you intended to say.

[Stella Armour]

Always so gentle, i love the way you write Will.
No dificult metaphors to wade through ... just pure and beautiful poetry ..

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Stella. You always leave something nice for me to find on my poems.

[Stella Armour]

That is because i just enjoy the way you write :)

[lildot]

This poem is so melodic and beautiful. Simple, yet elegant. I believe it could be lyrics for a new song… nicely done!

[willweb]

Thank you Lildot for your kind review of my poem. I am thrilled you enjoyed it so much.

[Ken e Bujold]

love the new write Will. now you need to give us a follow up piece, what the echo response was. not sure how long the wind takes to deliver such words in your part of texas but i will be keeping ears and eyes open for the response :)

ken

[willweb]

Thanks so much Ken. Not much of a breeze out there today but we will see.