become?

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As we wandered neighborhood lakes

while dreaming of beaches,

a croissant in our hand, shared but

portions left for another, small pieces to

strengthen wings and song,

we listened as the morning

made way for a classical evening

in English and other assorted languages,

each sounding a bit more romantic

than the previous

 

And as grammar came into question,

the confusion of the thoughts,

lingering in the present,

fading in the past,

we both smiled because

there was no reason not too

and every reason too

 

For you see, these things don't just happen,

they become...and we become with them 

 

when will you become?

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

A very realistic way of looking at life and its events. It masterfully tells us to achieve noble things, to work at it, to sacrifice for it, and not just have wishful thinking.
You are (becoming) a great writer

[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome 😊

[JessyJacob]

And you know very well your friend, my best is from a rich heritage family, he did knew what to do at that time, he did asked her to come out then, and now also he is matured enough to not to hurt her parents, he is matured at 16 and at 30s to take the right step, so dont or you cant mislead him even will fully.

[willweb]

Thanks for reading and commenting

[JessyJacob]

Hell Will, you are mentioned not, i am not commenting, its heartfelt emotional feeling for both as I am also in that emotional meladrama, being part, so i am not someone watching the movie, like how you have mentioned about your view.

[JessyJacob]

i feel sad for you web, as a poet as a friend, and anything else. This is not the right step now, it really shows immatured. why do you need to do that. If i am in that place i would have taken that step being major at that time, its not idea that didnt not come at that time, its the commitment people need to stay on, moving on is the best step of maturity, now, why do you want to take step that shows two attitudes, changing mind, now i have strength, all this talk is to satisfy others or defend. I think your friend is better than you that survived family with kids too, a friend like you is too late to think in time, i dont think not frustration or hurt that a reverse therapy or playing chess is you make. Stay on word, atleast her parents are happy, what for we are craving at this middle age if the parents at 60s cant understand and people at 30s need to do something like teenagers, that will entirely distupt the family people like them who give importance to religion. what they are losing evrything is going sleep drink chat, and what not, let her feel, sacrificing gives you back but cheennna will nake you lose everything. I dont think you are giving right idea.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

feeding nature while feeding our own brains by talking about things of substance...
conversations which help us become...
not text messages...but real talk, with real grammar...
assorted language, assorted people...melting pot.

[willweb]

Seems a bit old fashioned, doesn't it but...it still happens and all we can hope for is that it happens to us. Thanks so very much Jacob.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Wow... When will we become indeed?

So nice... to meet a true fellow poet...

I felt every line... good work, friend!!!

Please do keep it up!!!

;)

[willweb]

Thanks my friend. I appreciate your time and kind thoughts on my work.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

You are most welcome friend!

;)

[Lorry]

A beautiful experience, that lingers and is captured perfectly, within more than time.
Two people, strolling through a morning, senses heightened just with being together and suddenly, life makes a bit more sense and you just know that the possibilities have become endless, but strangely they all point in only one direction.
It is a rare moment of clarity that doesn't come along too often.
When it is realised, you should chase it for all you are worth.
Beautifully penned.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Lorry. You have it pinned exactly right. And those moments do still exists...if we let them. I appreciate you my friend.

[emmajoygreen]

I don't know why I smiled at the end of your poem. willweb From the start and until that finish there is such a feeling of closeness, of testing and finding just right, or being together - chatting, comfortable and more. Or, perhaps being almost but not quite but.. ' the thoughts, lingering in the present, fading in the past, we both smiled because.. ' A pause perhaps.. holding your breath.. waiting?

[willweb]

Thank you so much my friend for walking with me through these stanzas. Indeed, to talk, to stroll, to take in what is around you all the while cherishing those who are right next to you. It is the little things, not the hustle and bustle of today's world, but the springtime air, flowers blooming, blue skies and a smile that you can't wait to see. Thank you again

[emmajoygreen]

Do you understand my sense of humour, sir.. @ Your flow of words above suggest you might make a truly fine poet. :)

[willweb]

I understand and I am smiling too. : )