Daisies

);(

Junior picked a daisy

for the girl just down the street

He'd seen her for a few weeks now

and found her very sweet

But as he walked along the way

to get to her front door

Lightning struck and thunder boomed,

the skies began to pour

 

He ran till he was underneath

the oldest big oak tree

It was by far, the driest place

nearby that he could be

He looked down at the daisy

and the petals very white

That's when a thought came to his head

that seemed to be so right

 

He pulled the first one off the stem,

she loves me, then he said

Another perfect petal came

the daisy now had shed

Before too long just one remained,

his fingers they did reach

But now he knew the answer that

would come that it did preach

 

She loves me not rang through his mind

as he strolled towards his home

Then sat upon the wet front step

just frowning all alone

He sat there till the sun returned

so brightly in the sky

The rain had stopped, the clouds were gone,

the ground was turning dry

 

When then he saw that little girl

come walking with a grin

She had a daisy in her hand

and handed it to him

I picked this for you just to see

if you would like to play

Let's pull the petals off of it,

see what it has to say

 

He thought and thought, his frown it grew

for just a little while

When then his eyes they opened wide

and now he wore a smile

Ok, he said, but this is what

I think that we should do

Let's start it with, "She loves me not"

if that's ok with you

 

: )

Author's Note

Just having a little fun on a boring, quiet Friday.

Reviews

[Dave Brown]

A cutsey wootsey for all except the daisy

[willweb]

I appreciate it Dave

[Pete]

cute. kids are amazing and so telling. it doesn't take us long to figure things out and try to twist them to our advantage in order to get what we want. enjoyable read sure to bring a smile ... :)

[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend.

[AYVID N]

A very endearing poem and one that delves so deeply on every heart's wish to be loved. Junior was no different and it was wonderful how they resolved the dilemma. You're such a truly delightful romantic, my friend and your words renew our faith in love too.

[willweb]

Thank you Divya. Just having a little fun.

[AYVID N]

So good to read...You're most welcome!

[Ladysue]

This poem had me smiling ear to ear. Humorous and fun to read. It has that playfulness that we should never lose. I remember that game. Excellently written.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Ladysue for your nice review of my work. I am happy you enjoyed it.

[FGFRANKLIN]

Ah, trying to "fix" the game. (laughing) This was lots of fun and a quaint and humorous read. I applaud your ingenuity and imagination in the proffered scenario. Excellent read. Thank you for sharing your talents, Will. You never cease to amaze and entertain. Bravo! F.

[willweb]

Thats so very much Paul, I mean Fabian...ha, I just realized that the word "Fab" is the beginning of your name. Pretty cool.

[FGFRANKLIN]

Yeah, my buddy Smitty , now deceased, used to call me "The Fabulous One" He was a big kidder. He committed suicide, something I never would of dreamed of him doing. I've lost so many friends.

[Ken Simm.]

What an incredible monologue. Wonderful, whimsical and light. Until the storm. And then again afterwards. Love it.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Ken. I am glad you liked it.

[Soren]

I loved the story and its lightness as it then drifted dark only to come back again with a hopeful ending. The rhyme fit the story and brought the image of childhood. I also remember this game and as a child noticed that certain flowers had odd or even petals and depending on how you started the answer was always guaranteed. Great write I enjoyed it.

[willweb]

Thank you my friend. This was just a little poetic fun hoping to make a few people smile. I am happy it brought one to you

[Lorry]

Ah, the sweet innocence of youth, where how many petals a flower had has the peculiar ability to crush your soul and ruin your life forever, or until dinner time at the very least.
It reminds me of a playtime break that was cancelled because of (surprise surprise) rain and we had to stay in class. Some bright spark decided we all had to vote on who we fancied and it nearly destroyed me when the girl I liked got three votes. I swore then that two people had to die.
I never did find out who they were, but I always let her catch me during kiss chase just to make them jealous. And I didn't see her giving anyone else a choc biccy from her lunchbox, so by default I win and they lost 😊

[willweb]

I would say you were the winner and those other two losers need to stay in their lane and not mess with another's hoped for girlfriend with the fancy lunch box.

[Betty Hermelee]

I like the sweet story and a little twist at the end..kids are funny. the way they perceive the opposite sex...a bit coy, I would say....but this is their time to learn...
Nice Will
Best, B

[willweb]

Thank you Betty. Kids are funny and so innocent it is beyond cute sometimes. I appreciate you my friend.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome my friend!
Best, B

[Charlotte Flores]

This is such a sweet and charming poem! I love how it captures the innocence and playfulness of childhood crushes. The way Junior picks the daisy and tries to determine the girl's feelings for him is so relatable and cute. The twist at the end when the girl hands him a daisy to play the same game is heartwarming, and it shows how simple gestures can bring joy and connection between people. Overall, this poem is a delightful reminder of the beauty of young love and the magic of childhood. Thank you for sharing it!

[willweb]

Many thanks Charlotte. I appreciate you taking the time to read and for leaving such a nice review for me to find. I appreciate your time.