Fresh air

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You ask is it fresh, is what fresh I say

The air that you feel on this warm summer day

That soft blowing breeze, which flows past your face

Invisible flight, no color, no trace

But there is no taste, no texture, no feel

If I say it is fresh, would you think I’m for real?

Surely you would, why would I lie

Fresher than fresh, direct from the sky

Just made this morning, a few minutes ago

How fresh do you need it, just let me know

I’ve got plenty in stock; in fact it’s on sale

Marked down today, you just cannot fail

The price is just right, affordably so

Enjoy it right here or get it to go

Hundreds of uses, let’s bring them to light

For sailing a boat or flying a kite

For waving a flag or messing your hair

Nothing is better than fresh blowing air

Makes tumbleweeds move on their dry arid trip

Causes discarded paper to roll and to flip

Moves bright colored pinwheels to happily spin

Turns clothes on the line inside out, outside in

And open a window, you’ll see what I mean

That musty old room will smell new, crystal clean

And birds love it too, it helps them to fly

It dries up the streets if some rain passes by

It can come from the north, the west or the east

Or even the south if I dare say the least

It can be very cold, quite chilled to the bone

Or hot as the sun, up there all alone

Blowing softly or hard, hardly blowing at all

Through summer or spring or winter or fall

There’s fresh air by day and fresh air by night

Whatever you choose is sure to be right

You’ve so many choices, other places to go

Before you decide, I just want you to know

My air is the best, that’s what I’ve been told

Just look at the sign, over one billion sold

So buy it from me, you won’t have a care

Is it fresh, you may ask, it’s the freshest fresh air

Reviews

[Aura]

Fresh air, our greatest luxury, whether its on a cold winters day or on a hot summer night, smelling the fresh air does not cost a thing, yet it can bring people the most happiness and relaxation! I like the font that you used for this poem, for some reason it reminds me of a beachy type of font. I also really liked some of the
rhymes you used such as " For waving a flag or messing your hair, Nothing is better than fresh blowing air". My only suggestion is to separate parts of your poem into stanza's to make it easier to read! Either than that, I enjoyed the read!

[willweb]

Thanks so much and I will take your suggestion into consideration. Sometimes, when I start writing and it just comes, I leave it as is. When I write and keep going back to make changes, which is most of the time, I will break those up into stanzas.

[Aura]

You are most welcome, I understand, I used to do the same thing with my earlier poems that I posted, where I would not divide them into stanza's. However, I found them a little challenging to read when I re-visited them.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! This must be called Willweb's supermarket for fresh air. We have fresh food, fresh gas, fresh bills ...
Why not fresh air?
Some countries they do sell them.
This was enjoyable and brought some smiles. Some sarcasm is a joy.

[willweb]

Thank you Sami. I am happy you had fun with this.

[Sami Khalil]

Yes siiiirrrrr. You are welcome 😊.

[AYVID N]

I enjoyed this poem so much, dear Willweb. The concept is as fresh as mountain air. Perhaps, very soon, in this wretched world, fresh, good quality air will be marketed and sold and those who cannot afford it will perish.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Divya

[William Michael Reeves]

What would you charge for some premium air? And can I get a discount if I buy in bulk? I suppose supply chain issues have left you little to spare, but if I don't get any, I'm likely to sulk. What a cool idea. Refreshes my mind. Thanks

If I may, assuming our mutual poetic respect has advanced to allow criticism, I don't like this one centered. Feels too broad visually for me. Like too many lines are the same length and long.

[willweb]

Thanks my friend. I accept your suggestion and will move it and see how I like it in a bit. Not saying it will stay but I will certainly give it a shot.

[William Michael Reeves]

Or if you like centered maybe break it up a little more so it's not so phat. Find those spots that can be enjambed. If it could walk it looks like it would waddle.

[willweb]

Not many here will see it anyway so I will leave it left justified, it looks ok to me.

[William Michael Reeves]

Sometimes I think the same thing, not many out there. Except those mysterious readers who never review. That's the only thing that matters, your satisfaction. I'm just a caring reader who's pen can be rather bold.

[willweb]

It is no problem at all my friend. I am always open to suggestions or constructive criticism. I appreciate you reading my work.