An unfolded whisper

~

A lilac endeavor

of promised importance

came strolling along

on a path in the sun

Its fragrance unfurling

this side of September

when springtime was singing

that winter was done

With meadowlarks chatting

in off color language

while watching the roses

that bloom by the wall

She fancied a smile

in lace covered cotton

with hair gold and windy,

the belle of the ball

 

I stood there a’ staring,

my eyes hardly leaving

the shape of her world

filled with raspberry dreams

Along an old footpath

with grass patches growing

and banks touching lilies,

all lining the streams

My heart felt a tremor,

like mountaintops falling

in piles of pebbles

and granite like things

Her beauty a fashion,

none other was wearing,

a fine velvet cloth stitched

in apricot strings

 

She looks my direction

with eyes colored passion

and lips made of honey

as sweet as the bees

Now watching her fingers

collecting the samples

of Ginkgo leaves floating

the back of the breeze

She laughed in the open,

a bright sun was shining

midst butterflies tinting

their wings greenish blue

I followed her northward,

my hand in my pocket,

then pulled out a poem

said, “This is for you”

 

An unfolded whisper

‘tween petals of daisies

now telling a story

of love or of not

Her glance towards the paper

was finding her grinning,

her painted toes tingled,

her breath just forgot

I melted like butter

on sidewalks in August

when feeling her smile

pressed tightly to mine

I guess in the verses

with lines penned in rhythm

she knew of my joy,

I had told her in rhyme

 

So now we just wander

directions that beckon

when autumn is sleeping

and summer awakes

Picking up branches,

like sculpting a sunset

or bridging a pasture,

whatever it takes

With overall blue jeans

and knees wet and muddy,

we tend to the gardens

the earth it does claim

While sharing our wine

with a cat and a moon beam,

enjoying each other,

now who could complain

 

 

 

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Soooo good! I hope you have put melody to these lyrics. A poem is a song regardless, but this sings for notes! Plus it's a complete story and left me feeling comfortable. Like something is right in somebody's world. Excellent poem!!

[willweb]

Thanks so much Willam. It seems that inside, when I write rhyming poetry, I always have a melody playing along with the words.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I've heard it said that once in his life, a painter paints by the hand of God. Perhaps it is so, for a poet! Your rhyme scheme is so fluent and lovely, Will. I'd hang a star on this one!

[willweb]

Thanks Kelly. I always smile when you stop by and even more when you enjoy what you read. I appreciate your kindness. That is such a nice thing to say to me, I am truly humbled by your comment. You know I am a huge fan of yours and this is like Paul McCartney saying to me, "Will, I really like your song"

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is lovely. I found myself going back and re-reading to count the syllables and familiarize myself with the rhyme scheme. 6-6-6-5, 6-6-6-5, a-b-c-d, e-f-g-d. I really like this. You have embodied so many details and made ultimate use of every word within every line. I find this to be very sweet and light-hearted, filled with joy and delight. I like this very much. Well done.

[willweb]

Wow, coming from a poet I admire so much, this is quite a compliment. Thank you Linda Marie so much. I am thrilled you enjoyed this poetic journey through nature and my strange mind. : )

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree. No-one would complain. A wonderful journey in the poetry. The words made the reader believe and see every word. I loved how you used the language. The poetry, was a pleasure to be read. Thank you Will for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thank you so much my friend.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Will.

[Betty Hermelee]

A promised importance for sure in this exquisite poem Will. From start to finish it's just heaven to read... From flower to new found exhilaration each word is so meaningful. There is nothing more important than fascination and a dream come true. Your portrayal of the seasons is divine, but the best part for me is sharing each other's wine on a moonlit night. Excellent!
Best, B

[willweb]

Thank you so much Betty, I am pleased you liked this, I had a blast writing it.

[Betty Hermelee]

It's really special Will! And you're very welcome! keep up the exquisite work!
Best, B

[AYVID N]

Gosh, I wish I could write like you, dear Willweb. You are just a beautiful poet! Every word, every image is a joy to read and behold in my mind.

[willweb]

What a really nice thing to say to me dear Divya. Thank you so very much. Your kindness always humbles me.

[AYVID N]

You are most welcome my friend.

[Vol]

I cannot tell you how much I wish I could write ballads... Your imagery is strong, and playful, too... But I especially enjoy the theme of two people in soaring love and with her raspberry dreams that quake the heart till mountains fall...

[willweb]

Thanks so very much, I am glad you enjoyed this one and I appreciate your nice comment

[Dave Brown]

If Spring is as enjoyable as this, one more beautifully done poetic meander, It will be well worth the wait.
I forgot to mention that your recent 2 liner was a true gem.
I am finally realizing that you must think and speak in nothing but rhyme

[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend. I appreciate it.

[Sami Khalil]

Your poem unfolds into the newness of spring, into the gentleness of love, into the harvesting of the moonlight.
She will be so fortunate who will marry you; you have a great, romantic side.

[willweb]

Thank yous to you Sami for your nice and always smiling review of my poem. I appreciate you stopping by

[Sami Khalil]

Sorry. Fixed the typo. You are welcome Tex poet.

[Ken Simm.]

A pastorale stroll of a poem that lifts the heart.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Ken.