Take me, oh this soul doth plead

A Poe Challenge

 

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Once upon a midnight dreary, as I ponder weak and weary,

falling as a distant star comes reaching of my heart

Knees connect with fertile soil, darkness on this hour loyal,

twilight bids its fond farewell as evening spends its start

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Chilled this open field a’ rest, facing east my own confess,

silence comes in wintered thoughts a’ calling to my mind

Lone is found this majesty, born mine lonely eyes to see,

there upon the heavens form this beauty I do find

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Reaching for your open hand, actions of an empty man,

seeking but the wisdom that shall lead me to your side

Grasping at the frosted air, evermore I long to share,

in amongst these feelings glowing bright this velvet sky

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Take me, oh this soul does plead, thee shall be my every need,

endlessly I cherish every vision sent above

As a light does glisten free, when your smile my heart does see,

fending off this winter with the warmth of your sweet love

 

 

 

Author's Note

I was challenged to use the opening line of Poe’s “The Raven”
“Once upon a midnight dreary, as I ponder weak and weary”
and create a love poem following the form, cadence and rhyming pattern of the line

I hope you like it.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I do like your response to the challenge. Oh what a smile can do. Romantic and endearing. Enjoyed the rhythm, flow and musicality of this love poem. Well done will.

Chris

[willweb]

Thank you so much Chris.

[AYVID N]

The onset of twilight, the emergence of the heavens in all their twinkling glory and in the frosted lights a wish is made for the warmth of love.

You did a wonderful job with that line. Full justice done and in keeping with the spirit of it. The poem flows and is a joy to read.

[willweb]

Thanks again Divya. Happy to know you are around and reading. I can always count on you

[AYVID N]

Its always good to read you, my friend. You're welcome always. 😊

[Betty Hermelee]

A stunning poem of the need for love, tenderness and wisdom; a lonely man pleads to the cosmos to deliver this to his heart...."born my lonely eyes to see".....you also speak of love of the land, the seasons, and most importantly to those who have the warmheartedness to share love with you...and to bestow you with contentment. Beautiful choice of words, lines soft and gentle and lastly excellent rhyme.
Best, B

[willweb]

Thank you Betty. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem and leave such a nice comment.

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome Will!
Best, B