Everyone's a critic

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I walked outside this morning

and the moon was directly overhead

It was so bright it felt like a spotlight

So, I started singing...

 

Here comes the sun

do, do, do, do

Here's comes the sun, and I say

It's al...

 

Well, before I could even finish the first verse,

a big cloud rolled across

and covered the moon,

leaving me standing in the dark

 

Sheesh, everyone's a critic

 

 

 

(Maybe I should have sung

"Moonshadow" by Cat Stevens)

 

Reviews

[JD Major]

Sounds like the dark cloud that follows me around all the time. Please send him back when he's thru with you, thanks. ...Just a minor criticism, Will, your singing's a little off key.

[willweb]

Oh, I asked them the key and they said B flat. Maybe I took it too literal. : )

[JD Major]

...Flat's my singing key too, inherited from my Dad :)

[Chris Shaw]

The clouds blotted out your happy:) Isn’t that always the way? Someone or something just has to do that.

I would have been happy still with the Beatles singing Here comes the sun even if it was dark.

Another fun write from your pen will. Now weren’t the Beatles just ace ?

Chris

[willweb]

They were definitely one of my faves.
Thanks so much Chris.

[Re-Pete]

especially the ones who do nothing. very cool, clever write. it made me think, chuckle and say, "oh no, not me." you write really well ... :)

[willweb]

Thanks Pete. : )

[Dave Brown]

possibly you just picked the wrong time of year but singing a song at any time is always a great idea and the H with critics

[willweb]

Thanks Dave, glad you decided to sing along. : )

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

LOL! This is really cute. Someone always has to come along to ruin the parade.

[willweb]

I know, I mean, sometimes it gets a bit old. And who doesn't like the Beatles? Thanks so much my friend.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

The moon is a harsh mistress to Even you dear Will

Not sure from where I heard those lines??

Anyway love love loved your write

She obviously wanted to hear a jingle about herself not the sun ha ha and rightly let you know in no uncertain way

Perhaps roll over Beethoven next time

[willweb]

Thanks so much Julie. Yeah, I mean, come on, I'm not that bad of a singer...am I. : )

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

I dunno
Prob not a bad singer
They say all poets are artists too but I’m not

[Nisreen]

Lol
this is funny !!!
Clouds suck when you were expecting the spotlight

[willweb]

Thanks Nisreen. Glad you got a chuckle out of this one

[Tania Mo]

Aww geez the world is full of them. Pay no attention lol. Nice one

[willweb]

Thanks Tania. I am happy you liked this.

[AYVID N]

Well you just can't please them all, dear Willweb. You light a lamp and go on with your singing. The breeze will carry the critic cloud away. I loved this poem.

[willweb]

Thank you my friend. Just having a little morning fun.

[AYVID N]

Enjoy your day!