Caterpillar wishes

~

 

She sat in a

  lonely field crying

    amidst daises wishing

  for her smile,

      when along crawled

         a green caterpillar

   

She cradled it

        tenderly

          in her hands

  

and between

      tear drops

        made a wish…

 

The caterpillar

  glistened

    as she suddenly

  sprouted

      colorful wings

    and happily flew

        away from the

    cocoon of sadness

      that had held her,

      

 with her new

       found friend

          by her side

 

~

Reviews

[Seriana]

Magical, serene, happy. Taking away the sad to another place entirely. I love these kind of poems. They are right up my alley!!

[willweb]

I am happy you liked this one so much, that makes me happy. : ) Thank you Seriana for always being so kind.

[lightsong]

Though it is written with simplicity and with an idea that has been used before many times, yet, the sheer beauty of your little gem is moving and poignant, the font, the shape and the design of it, make it even more touching, perfection... I can hear it as a little song through the soft winds at that field.

[willweb]

Thank you so much my friend for your kind thoughts. I appreciate your visit

[John the Baptist]

The caterpillar imagery is effective here because it shows life is not static, but dynamic. The cocoon of sadness vanished into a new phase of joy. Thus none of us should give up too soon.

[willweb]

Thanks so much John. You are exactly right.

[Coyote Poetry]

Those butterfly wishes, we do need Will.
"and between
tear drops
made a wish"
The above lines could stand alone and thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thanks so much Coyote, glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome Will.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

I loved the transformation into a butterfly

[willweb]

I thought it made for a better happy ending. Thank you again. I am really happy you liked this one.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Love this it’s beautiful
Well done !

[willweb]

Thank you so much Julie

[Chris Shaw]

Beautiful expression here. Comforting another pays dividends to the comforter too. A poem of compassion. Lovely work will.

Chris

[willweb]

Thank you so much Chris

[Cherrie Palmer]

... and our wishes have wings
Very nice.

[willweb]

Thank you so much.

[JD Major]

I've wished upon a star, over a well, a fountain, a turkey bone in competition for a wish, and over blown-out candles, but never thought of a caterpillar, seems so obvious now ...what better than a butterfly in waiting :) ...of course, with my luck, maybe a moth. ...Yet another cocooned-idea-gem transformed to a butterfly, Good one! ( ...as an aside, can margarine fly too? :)

[willweb]

Thanks JD.

[Joanna Hall]

It's a lovely idea. Caterpillar to butterfly, sorrow to joy. Reveals something about what nature can do to heal human pain. Quite a deep truth.