O' waves of gray

O' waves of gray, soft subtle sheens,

a flow you drift this somber shore

Of ancient thoughts and humbled dreams

and moments found to but endure

 

Come take me there, your sorted mist,

where mermaids sing harmonic tunes

Beneath this stardust, diamond kissed.

within the beams of winter moons

 

For I alone do call thy name

in echoes cast a frigid breeze

Before the storm of sheltered shame

to put this aching mind at ease

 

You see, her heart I sought to win,

attempts amassed a thousand ways

Lone footprints scattered ever thin,

a serpentine of darkened days

 

Alas, my quest did not succeed

she left me for another's arm

It mattered not, my love did bleed,

once fallen to the suitor's charm

 

So here on hands and knees I crawl,

an empty vessel lost and turned,

Who once believed he had it all

a cost, the wicked lessons learned

 

The end I've found in front of me

till breaths escape this tortured soul

To sink the depths your fevered sea,

as life this day fails my control

 

Till sunlight finds her smile again

and she can drink the silent dawn

These memories of times we've been,

shall disappear, now I am gone

Reviews

[Re-Pete]

ouch. a real downer. such sadness in that gray. wonderful imagery here. some unforgettable wording and lines. the first four versus blew me away. could feel the troubled anguish ... :)

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Pete.

[JD Major]

Your pieces, your written images, never miss hitting a tender spot, Will, the heart-wrenching ones as welcome as the happy ones. ...I wonder, do they come hard, lots of tweaking, or in a flow, almost as if from outside yourself?

[willweb]

Since you asked, they do pretty much come out in a flow, as if coming from the outside. Basically, I come up with a theme and then a cadence and just start writing. Or an opening line will get stuck in my head and I will write to that. I will have to make a few minor tweaks here and there but it stays close to the original. Though I will read it back several times over a few days(usually) prior to posting. Thank you again JD

[JD Major]

Thanks for sharing that Will. I kinda thought flow, as your pieces always flow naturally, never forced.

[Chris Shaw]

Wonderfully rich narrative. Much enjoyed with an evening cup of tea.

Chris

[willweb]

Thanks again Chris.

[Dave Brown]

another impressive offering
it takes me a week to offer up this much poetics
all very nicely done

[willweb]

Hey, thanks Dave. I appreciate it. Some of these I hang onto for a while.