In a field laced with nevers

~

 

sitting alone

in a field laced with nevers

that sunlight avoids

as stars fade from view

 

picking a clover

of unlucky petals

found on the edge

of a soft summer hue

 

seeing a path

leading up to tomorrow

winding its way

past the frown on my face

 

different scenes

for a mind that is empty

outlines of sadness

that boundaries trace

 

echoes employ

every decibel playing

counting the measures

as harmony spills

 

bouncing about

lonely treetops now crying

running from voices

that call from the hills

 

while here I sit

in this field laced with nevers

limiting sounds

sent to muffle the clear

 

stuck in a world

where the silence is screaming

muting the verses

I’m longing to hear

 

~

 

Reviews

[Ellie Cohen]

Splendid writing with a great deal of depth. Thank you.

[willweb]

Thank you for your nice comment

[John the Baptist]

The last verse indicates the cause of this malaise may be a block. Yes, that literary gear jam does tend to make one feel cordoned off in a field of "nevers," for the undamming of the creative flow seems to be in the distant future at the earliest. But don't struggle with it; that only makes the block grow stouter. Just stay open and alert and let the muse awaken as it will. For it surely will.

[willweb]

Thanks John. Not so much a block in writing but a block in attitude.

[light and ashes]

Really great writing here, though, profoundly sad and lonely.

100

[willweb]

Thank you so very much L&A

[light and ashes]

You are so very welcome.

[Chris Shaw]

Wonderful flow of words here will and visually pleasing with it. Lovely composition. Have a happy Saturday.

Chris

[willweb]

Thank you Chris.

[Ken e Bujold]

extremely well paced poem here Will. the subject so simple, but the cadence is pitch perfect and thus absolutely enchanting to read.

one of your best from where i sit in the cheap seats

ken

[willweb]

Thanks Ken. I'll see if I can get you some better tickets. : )

[Gee]

Jeez that's so good.
Beautifully written, great content and trips off the tongue.
You ain't bad at this Willweb, ain't bad at all :))))
If folk wanna learn rhyming verse they should come visit you.
Good morning sir

[willweb]

Thank you so much Gee.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is so sad....loneliness is this subject's best friend.
and the silence is so loud...the only echoes are the speakers lone
heart beating...then ebbing...then stopping....
without love.
j.

[willweb]

Thanks Jacob.

[JD Major]

Sadly beautiful, can see your images so well, and touch them.
Kinda sorry to find you sitting there, Will, maybe you're a little down these days, maybe "regrouping."
I call it being in "my Cave" ...maybe I got that from that old Men are from Mars, Women ... book :)

[willweb]

Thanks my friend. Just a poem basically. I appreciate you concern and your support. Not much of that around this site lately so, thank you.

[JD Major]

...Have a good weekend Will :)