Falling from new heights

 

I saw her walking down the path,

then leaning on this tree

I wondered if she just might like

to be up here with me

 

I said, “come on, it’s nice up here”

She said, “I like the ground”

I yelled, “the view is very clear,

I see for miles around”

 

She said, “but here the grass is green,

the flowers at my eye

I could not see these wondrous things

from up there in the sky”

 

“This tree is old, this branch is strong,

it easily holds the weight

I’ve been up here an hour or so

I’m sure that it won’t break”

 

“Oh that’s not it, my climbing friend,

that is not it at all

I do not think that branch is weak

and both of us would fall”

 

“Then what, if you will tell me please

keeps you so far below

For where I’m at, this highest peak

provides a perfect show”

 

“I just prefer the feeling of

the earth beneath my feet

The fragrance of the summer breeze

upon my face so sweet”

 

“But way up here the sky is blue,

like nothing that you’ve seen

The valley and the mountain side,

as if comes from a dream"

 

“Well, I’ll not climb this tree with you

and if a friend you be

Then you will slip down from that branch

and come down here with me”

 

I shimmied down the mighty oak

and staring in her eyes

I saw a view I’d never seen

on any morning skies

 

She said, “I’m glad you didn’t fall

from up there way above"

That’s when I thought, oh yes I did,

for I just fell in love

 

I found her to be beautiful

much more than any sights

And truth be known, I’m glad I’m down

for I’m afraid of heights

 

(But don't tell her)

Author's Note

Just having a little fun for an audience of none. : )

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

Are talking of heaven or just a mountain with many paths where the beauty is always the same when we reach the top.
Thank you for making me think and writing.

[willweb]

Thanks so much for stopping by to read.

[Betty Hermelee]

A sweet tale of persuasion, perspective and instant love; I found the rhyme to be perfect for this piece and there is even a bit of comic in it as well… each person is unique and sees nature differently… in this case it is who is rhe most persuasive…
Lovely Will
Best
B.

[willweb]

Thank you Betty. I am happy you had fun with my little love poem. I appreciate you my friend.

[Betty Hermelee]

Loved it! And you’re very welcome Will!
Best
B.

[hazy]

People really can be so different from one another and still find peace in love. Your use of metaphor is rich and engaging, and I love the casual banter between these two. This is a really excellent poem, and is written beautifully.

[willweb]

Yes they certainly can. Thanks so much for coming by to read. I am glad you enjoyed this

[JD Major]

Great story, fun rhyming read, Will.
I'm happy you didn't literally fall in love, much better that you climbed down.
Moral of the story?: Up Close & Personal is only a Shimmy away :)

[willweb]

I like that saying, I will remember that. : )
Thanks so much JD.

[Samuel Dickens]

How well this exemplifies the game of romance. Though drunk on love now, I fear he'll miss that tree one day. (Speaking from experience) Still, I wish the earthbound fellow lots of luck.

[willweb]

Thanks Samuel. I am glad you liked this one. I am sure he'll end up back in that tree again someday. : )

[danielle.]

Ohh I’m a sucker for a good rhyming poem! I love this. It did make me smile.

[willweb]

Thanks so much again. I am thrilled it made you smile

[Ann Outlaw]

I enjoyed reading this, but I especially smiled when I got to the very last lines. A surprise at the end that I didn't know I needed. Thanks for sharing this.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Ann. You never know with me what you will find at the end of a poem. I am just happy this one made you smile

[Miss Sharon]

What a marvelous write! I love the closing lines...(And truth be known, I’m glad I’m down for I’m afraid of heights) (But don't tell her) ~Bravo indeed. ~Sharon

[willweb]

Thank you so very much. I am glad you had fun with this one.

[Ken e Bujold]

ah yes how a beautiful woman can alter a man's most obstinate course. know the feeling well

love the poem, you found at least an audience of one will

[willweb]

Thanks so much Ken. I knew I could count on you. : ) I appreciate it my friend.

[lildot]

You had me from the start! Clever and sweet. I like it !!! Well done.

[willweb]

Thank you for your kind comments. I am happy this one touched you