Peaches and Dreams

Peaches and Dreams
Tending to my fruit stand, another lonely day Hoping for a customer to happen ‘long the way When then I saw approaching a funny colored van It pulled off on the shoulder, I wondered of its plan The back doors slowly opened and there before my eyes Stood a gorgeous woman beneath these sunny skies Her eyes were soft and sable with hair a darker hue She smiled and said hello to me I said, “How do you do?” She stood before my table, I couldn’t help but stare First she touched an apple, then she touched a pear Suddenly she shouted, for now her hand did reach Excitedly she questioned “Please may I have a peach?” All I could do was stutter, as I could barely breathe She took a bite and then exclaimed “The sweetest I believe” Then she grabbed a couple, and walking to her van Sat upon the rear end sill, then patted with her hand I stumbled there to join her, she handed one to me “I just adore your peaches” “Yes ma’am, that I can see” I sat there with her eating and maybe I am dumb But juice was dripping from her lip, I brushed it with my thumb This seemed to make her happy, her beauty such a view Then I could not believe my ears, She asked, “Can I kiss you?” Well, forget what I said earlier the “dumb” part wasn’t right I pressed my lips against hers and held them there real tight They were sweet and sticky, delicious like the fruit Then we separated, she grinned and said, “You’re cute” “I really think I love you and will forever true” I felt my heart just skip a beat, “Yes ma’am, I love you too” “I just adore your peaches, they’re the best in all the land” We kissed again, this time goodbye, she climbed into her van I watched as she departed, standing on the curb Thinking of her kisses and the last thing that I heard I then felt kind of lousy this pristine summer day Not for what had happened, but what I did not say I didn’t have the heart to tell this woman of my dreams The fruits this day that she enjoyed were really nectarines

Reviews

[Dave Brown]

all very nicely rhymed with lotsa interest
and what she doesn't know probably won't hurt her
but if she comes back with a frown, time to leave town!

[willweb]

I believe she would understand. : ) Thanks so much.

[Chris Shaw]

Romantic, sensual and with a smile at the end. Much enjoyed will. You tell a good story in a poetic format.

Chris

[willweb]

Thank you so much Chris. I am happy you had a little fun with this one.

[Cherrie Palmer]

What a great job setting up the story. Then letting it unfold with that old and familiar 70's vibe.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Cherrie. I am happy you liked this fruity poem

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahahaha .. what a great story telling poem .. such a twist at closing .. i am grateful for having read .. and my laughter ... just about out loud ;) yes! we have so little time to say what is on our noodles and hearts .. so very many moments pass us by ... hindsight can give us the tongues of angels and words of the bards .. to what use in such a situation .. so funny your speaker kind of had the last laugh after all .. really enjoyed the read
E.

[willweb]

Thank you so much. I am thrilled you had fun with this one. And you are right, hindsight is great especially when it does produce the last laugh. Thanks again for stopping by

[softlyfall]

This is funny but also very romantic and sensual. A nectarine by any other name would taste as sweet, and all that.
Now I have Whipping Post from Eat a Peach on my head radio, thank you very much.
I enjoyed this. You are a natural storyteller, i think

[willweb]

Thanks again, now we both have that song playing in our heads. "Oh Lord, I feel like I'm dying" Though, I'm not complaining...gotta love The Allman Bros.

[Brad Dehler]

LOL. Very good. Wait for it.... Classic. Charming, romantic, funny. This is a good one Mr Willweb. I hope all the readers indulge in the peach that is this poem. Or is it a different kind of fruit? So Good, I will be thinking about this one today. Much appreciated

[willweb]

Thanks so much Brad. I am glad you enjoyed this one. Hey, peaches, nectarines...they're all good as far as I am concerned.

[Brad Dehler]

...especially when attracting such an event....

[willweb]

That's for sure.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the tale and I liked the ending. You create a interesting situation and you held my attention to the last word. Those girls who stole our thoughts and hearts for a moment. A poet's wealth. Thank you for sharing the entertaining and fun poetry to read.
Coyote

[willweb]

Wow, I am happy you liked this. It is one of my favorites. Thank you so much.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this poem my friend and you are welcome.

[Lisasview]

Such a darling story in poetic form with sweet rhymes...
Really did enjoying it and so will be looking at more of your poems...
Stories are always so interesting and it is the reader that sees or does not see themselves in the story.
As I am rather new to all this I want to ask what form you are using? ..if any because I only see a hint of punctuation here and there. I use punctuation as I personally find it rather important to express the feelings of each and every line I write.
Lisa, now in Spain

[willweb]

Hi and thank you for reading and commenting on my poem. I am happy you enjoyed it. As far as a form, I really don't get into that a whole lot. I do try to write my rhyming poems with a melody in mind so that they could be easily sung if someone wanted to. I do not use punctuation a whole lot, though I probably should. Thank you again for stopping by to read.

[K.P.H.M]

Such a great piece! I loved the twist at the end.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much.