Solitude

                    Solitude

Dancing trees and lily pads and shadows on the ridge Chocolate streams and waterfalls flow far beneath the bridge Neon lights in cursive form with words to pull apart Falling into silent whims will break a longing heart Fingers trace a photograph which once belonged inside Rocket ships and satellites there’s no place left to hide Broken cups of China glass in sinks around the world Corners call in sorrowed weeps as sadness is unfurled Just outside the sun is bright with blue skies far and near Out beyond the curtains is a scene so very clear Follow down the winding path till you can see your way Let them know your smile glows in magical display Count the leaves of clover as you stroll a sea of green Four will be the number that will bring about your dream Nothing ever works the way we think it often should It seems there is an ounce of pain to couple with the good You’re sure to see the meaning if you open up your eyes And let the joy wash over you when soon you realize That friendship is a kind of gift no holiday required It hangs around the strangest place in all that is desired A hand will stretch the miles long for just a small caress And worry when you’re feeling low If this I must confess But if you find it genuine while you are far from home Your heart will feel the solitude yet you are not alone

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Surrealistic imagery, honest emotion, and flawless rhyming. This one is filled with empathy and compassion too! Your poetry is a joy to read! Lydi***

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Lydi for your nice comment.

[Carola]

i love your poetry, it has everything.... creative imagery, emotive, good story, the rhyme is an added bonus for me, and it's not this one-liner random thoughts of free verse which I don't understand nor particularly care for.
I've put your poetry in my library.
cheerio carola

[willweb]

Thank you so much for your kind words. I am happy you enjoy my work. Thank you again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Third line in second stanza confused me a bit.

Never alone when we have friends to lean on. Far from home, those hands will stretch to us.
This reminds me of being in a spaceship looking down at Earth, remembering, fingering, tracing the photographs of loved ones...
feeling alone but not necessarily lonely.
I often feel that way without going into space.
j.

[willweb]

Thanks so much and yes...one too many tos in that line, I have deleted the extra one. Nice catch.

[Elaine]

I found many lines in this write that are pieced together so well! Timing of poem flows nicely and overall creates a lovely read. Thank you!

[willweb]

Thank you Elaine for your nice comment. I am glad you liked it.

[MsJewel]

Your timing and word placement is absolutely perfect - but more important than that is the wonderful message you have shared in this wonderful poem. Such a delight to read you again. :) Julie

[willweb]

Thank you so much Julie. It is nice to see (read) you again too.

[poetgurl]

Neon lights in cursive form
with words to pull apart

Oh how I like this part, Neon lights in cursive form, very creative.
I really enjoyed this write, awesome job!

[willweb]

Thanks so much for the nice comment. I am thrilled you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

My friend, so many statements stood out in the poetry.
"A hand will stretch the miles long
for just a small caress
And worry when you’re feeling low
If this I must confess"
The above lines were my favorite. I liked the honest tone and the story telling in the words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thank you so very much. I am happy you liked this one.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.