Straightjacket_Cafe

 

 

Lunacy,

poetry,

there is no

difference

~ 

Insanity,

cafe,

ultimately they

rhyme

 

 

 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

interesting ... personally i am not serious enough to be lunatic .. tho people around me in my "other" life have called me crazy ... and there is certainly a swirl of insanity that seems to grip WC every now and then .. i agree with momzilla; "Succinct and amusing"
E.

[willweb]

Thanks so much E. Just barking a bit. :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Nope. No difference at all... well penned, Will.

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Rita.

[Coyote Poetry]

Lunacy poetry can be very good. Madmen write the best words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Then I should fit in well. :) Thank you so very much Coyote.

[Coyote Poetry]

I have been a madman for 56 years. Keep me safe from the normal folks and you are welcome.

[katja]

concise, abstract & well thought out...
... nothing wrong with a little insanity. mayhaps this is why i feel so at home

much enjoyed,
will

~yekaterina

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Miss M. just a bit of craziness on my part.

[AprilRN1210]

the crazier the better... no wonder I feel at home :)
nicely done Will..

[willweb]

Thanks so very much April

[Baby Ricochet]

Holy s**t I should have thought of that!! Great work Will

[willweb]

Thanks my friend, I knew you would like this.

[RomaJ]

Rhyming. Insanity. It drives me insane hahaha it's always in my head. In my blood polluting my soul. All my poems were meant to be free verse:) lol
Short but meaningful write. Well Done.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much RomaJ for stopping by.

[BAlanMorgan]

words don't need to rhyme in order to be poetic. "After the Sea-Ship—after the whistling winds;

After the white-gray sails, taut to their spars and ropes,

Below, a myriad, myriad waves, hastening, lifting up their necks,

Tending in ceaseless flow toward the track of the ship:

Waves of the ocean, bubbling and gurgling, blithely prying,

Waves, undulating waves—liquid, uneven, emulous waves,

Toward that whirling current, laughing and buoyant, with curves,

Where the great Vessel, sailing and tacking, displaced the surface;"
by Walt Whitman

perfect example of wonderful poetry without rhymes

what I thought you did, however, was wonderful in pointing out that anything can mean what we choose it to mean as long as we try. I loved the stanza separations, one word, one word, three syllables, then closing word--moreover, you captured poetry in the "ultimately they rhyme." Keep up the stuff. I continue to see you using these strong writing styles that do not slow the poem, but rather germinate it into the reader. This is another quick read, with a long recurring ring in my ears--something to think about. For future poems, try to push the box of writing, however, into something new--instead of rhyming insanity and café, (which slightly rhyme) take the element of what they are--Asylum, and coffee house-ultimately they-rhyme. That would hold the same power, with a unique edge. (just a thought to consider). Can't wait for more. Let me know anything I could improve on too in mine.

[willweb]

Thanks so much, but honestly the key here was they do not rhyme...yes, I suppose the final sound of each word does, but the meter changes that into a non-rhyme (in my opinion) This was just a quick write and a bit of whining. :)

[BAlanMorgan]

it may have been a quick poem, however, some of the greatest songs modern America and England sing along to in the radio were written in only 15 minutes. That's it. You made that, and I felt what I put was just in summing up the power behind your "quick write and a bit of whining." again I say: good stuff :)

[R Smith]

lucky they rhyme Will, would have ruined this poem otherwise, sorry just trying to be smart, bad move i guess from the man who wrote the dummies guide to poetry haha, great work as always :)

[BAlanMorgan]

I agree this is really great, however, poetry doesn't need to rhyme to be impactful

[willweb]

I never really rhymed much until I started writing those collabs with Ana. Thanks so much both of you.

[MomzillaNC]

Succinct and amusing :D

[willweb]

Thanks so much Momz.

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)