Shudders in echoes

 

 

“I'd never known her to cry”

 

Her smile that warms

each heart that it touches

Springtime and daisies,

blue morning skies

 

“but this time is different for sure”

 

As rivers stop flowing

neath cloud altered whispers

set off in motions

of sorrow filled cries

 

“she's shaking with tears in her eyes”

 

knees meeting soil

her face now she’s hiding

shudders in echoes

of pain she does know

 

“as she picks up what’s left of the night”

 

in moon beam intentions

now star lit and lonely

I hold her in comfort

so my love does show

Author's Note

Inspired by sadness, love and comforting fears as well as the Black Rebel Motorcycle Club's song "The Toll" Italicized words = BRMC lyrics.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A sad story in the poem. I liked how you told the story in the poem.
"in moon beam intentions
now star lit and lonely
I hold her in comfort
so my love does show"
A very good ending to the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thank you so much for always being so kind to me.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy your word and you are welcome.

[Ana B.]

Damn....heart touching words.....for some reason all along I could hear Maroon 5's ''She will be loved'' in my head.....

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Ana B. It is always a pleasure when you stop by.

[Ana B.]

I'm very glad when i do. You've got yourself a fan :)

[Cool Girl]

I love this one so much!! It's going in my favorites:)

[willweb]

Thank you so very much my friend.

[Cool Girl]

You are very welcome:)

[Lizardo]

ah this is sad but beautiful poem, I did enjoyed this a lot, specially the opening stanza
Great piece of work!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Lizardo.

[Lizardo]

you are welcome my friend

[Tiana]

Beautiful, sad and very touching poetry ...

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Island Girl, I am thrilled you liked this one.

[Tate Morgan]

Well done a lot of thought went into the creation of this work,

[willweb]

Thanks so much Tate. Just my interpretation of the lyrics.

[R Smith]

a mighty Will poem to resound through the halls of this lonely Cafe, beauty personified his words take us on a journey of life and love, always a great poem when you write on here Will :)

[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend. Funny how my head becomes larger every time I read one of your reviews. I think I need a new hat now. :)

[R Smith]

haha look out for those door frames, they get you every time lol

[Falling Leaf.]

It's a growing trend to incorporate someone else's words into poetry, I like the new style as long as credit is given to the original author of course, you did well here, a beautiful and slightly sad write, thanks for sharing~

[willweb]

Thanks so much Falling Leaf. I have written often using favorite song lyrics as inspiration and always give credit to the artist. It is how my mind reads between the lines of a song.