Crying in the cold

 

 

Walking alone

with only an unobstructed barren view,

miles it seems have disappeared

as journeys are now cut short

before a sunrise

of discarded flame

 

Caught in the emptiness

of a heart spilling,

puddling at my feet,

filling to the brim

the ruts of past smiles,

now uncurved and jagged

 

As I seek a cloud, a shadow,

a fallen feather, anything, amidst the dust

stirred of twisted branches

where Braille is a tree trunk

I no longer want to read

in this nothing I have left

 

I fall, face down,

tear tracks smudged

but never forgotten

tasting this defeat of flavored sorrows

seasoned by a stark winter…

crying in the cold

 

Reviews

[armin]

oh my God such a heartfelt expression of your bad times
As I seek a cloud, a shadow,
a fallen feather, anything, amidst the dust
stirred of twisted branches
where Braille is a tree trunk
I no longer want to read
in this nothing I have left

my favourite stanza, keep it up.

armin. ...

[willweb]

Thank you Armin. I am thrilled you liked this one. I appreciate you stopping by to read and leaving such a wonderful comment.

[armin]

you should sing 'Thriller' then. Joking.

[Jamie]

This is brilliant! Great job!

[willweb]

Thank you Jamie, so very much. I appreciate your kindness.

[Jamie]

You're welcome :)

[Lizardo]

This piece is excellent and I have to say that it really speaks the truth
Great writing, I love it

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Lizardo for stopping by today and leaving such kind words for me.

[Vanesa Markovic]

Ana sent me a request for this piece and I'm glad she did.
This is such an honest expression of melancholy, which can often be terrifying to share with others.
You paint your sadness beautifully, thank you for being brave enough to share it.
-VM

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Vanesa. I am thrilled you liked this one. Somedays feel like this and somedays don't, I guess this was one of those days. I appreciate your visit and Ana for sending you the request.

[MomzillaNC]

So beautifully composed. Your pen is so iconically romantic. This one leaves us feeling bereft…

[willweb]

Thank you so very much MomZ. You are always far so nice to me with your reviews. Not sure I deserve them but I always look forward to reading them.

[MomzillaNC]

I'm honest, Will. If I see something that I feel could improve upon a theme, I will make suggestions in my NOTES. You know that. It's hard, sometimes, to accept positive feedback -- at least, it is for me. I always rather suspect the person is just being kind. But, let me set your mind to rest on that front: I think it would be unkind to be merely flattering. If I don't have something honestly and forthrightly complimentary, I will either not review or leave only the most banal remarks.

In the utmost sincerity, I find you work beautiful and elegantly composed, thoughtful and entertaining. Always.

[willweb]

Thank you, that means alot.

[MomzillaNC]

yvw :)

[Matching Socks]

Beautifully written Will.
It's hard to review these very sad ones. They're very relatable for me too, we all have those ups and downs.
You're writing is very expressive of the down times here.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Ana. Winter, even though it has its fun points is always a season that brings with it these feelings of sadness and being alone. I appreciate you finding this one.

[therisa]

Will, this has to be, your darkest poem, yet to date. Has this extreme cold, gotten to you? Sigh. For I can feel myself, walking these steps, which you so eloquently describe, in such detail, my body is shivering, sitting indoors, reading this poem. Thank you, Will, for sharing this poem.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Therisa. Just expressing the winter blues a little. I figured I had written enough loving winter poems it was time to pen the other side of the season.

[therisa]

I understand, Will. Just didn't expect this, from you.