Crying in the cold

 

 

Walking alone

with only an unobstructed barren view,

miles it seems have disappeared

as journeys are now cut short

before a sunrise

of discarded flame

 

Caught in the emptiness

of a heart spilling,

puddling at my feet,

filling to the brim

the ruts of past smiles,

now uncurved and jagged

 

As I seek a cloud, a shadow,

a fallen feather, anything, amidst the dust

stirred of twisted branches

where Braille is a tree trunk

I no longer want to read

in this nothing I have left

 

I fall, face down,

tear tracks smudged

but never forgotten

tasting this defeat of flavored sorrows

seasoned by a stark winter…

crying in the cold

 

Reviews

[Workvio]

This piece evokes a quietly calm contemplative silence that gently brushes the chambers of ones heart in reading; to feel each painted emotion; to savor the taste of each painted pain; to leave one, in reading, shivering within your heart penned misery of crying in the cold ...

[Workvio]

Intensely dark in oozing depressed and dreary to the nth degree ... Something I can more than relate to at certain time, and during certain cycles, of my own personal life ... Well done ...

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Marvin. I hope those dreary days are behind you.

[The Black Warrior]

These are the poems that makes me cry...this is so sad Will, the emotion in this poem is so intense!!!

See! I told you... you make us cry, laugh and smile :DD

Thank you for sharing dear :D

[willweb]

Thank you so very much my sweet friend.

[The Black Warrior]

You are very welcome Will :D

[R Smith]

a very different road your going down here Will, its got a cold feel, winter of course but its pure poetry, a departure from your style that's very pleasing and remarkable :)

[willweb]

Thank you so much my friend. You never know what style I will fall into, most by accident.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

What a sad feeling you describe here in your poem. Very well done, Will. :) Rudi

[willweb]

Thank you so much Rudi. Your kind words are always welcome.

[Baby Ricochet]

I don't like the cold. Crying in the cold would really blow. I get that

[willweb]

Yeah, frozen teardrops and all...that has to sting. Thanks so much BR.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful description used in the poem. I had to read again.
"As I seek a cloud, a shadow,
a fallen feather, anything, amidst the dust
stirred of twisted branches
where Braille is a tree trunk
I no longer want to read
in this nothing I have left"
The above lines could stand alone as a poem. I could feel the thoughts and the disappointment/coldness in the emotions of the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and leave such a wonderful review of my work. From one I so admire, this really means a lot to me.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy your poetry. You write with a Dryden style. Honest, direct and thoughts provoking.

[Tiana]

Vivid imagery and heartfelt emotions ... Wonderfully written , Will ... Sending you a pocket full of sunshine :)

[willweb]

Thank you so much Island Woman, I appreciate that sunshine and your kind words.

[ANTO]

Will I could have swore I reviewed this yesterday - I definitely read it and wrote something (not Irish) in the review widget - but this site has been so glitchy of late that reviews are disappearing up the wazoo faster than I can type. So Im glad you RR'd me my friend.
Yeah - I remember the review, I said "This is such a shock for me to be reading this and to picture it coming from the same pen as 'Snow Drift Dreams' and 'Warmth' - it doesnt compute BUT then again we dont compute - we arent computers - and this is testament that we all get the blues and we all have to face them as best we can - but friends help turn them around and thats what friends are for."
If you would be so kind as to regard me as your friend I will help turn these blues around - how does green sound ??? :D

[willweb]

Green sounds great to me, it is my favorite color. Thanks so much my friend. Yep, we do all experience down days, but thanks to good friends like you, they are few and far between. I appreciate you taking the time to review this again, this site definitely needs some bugs worked out...I think I saw a few cockroaches sneaking around. :)

[anne]

I don't know but in present circumstances I feel this like a song sung for me...
I fall, face down,
tear tracks smudged
but never forgotten
tasting this defeat of flavored sorrows
seasoned by a stark winter…
crying in the cold.......
sometimes it's so painful that there suggests no ray...beautiful creation..:))

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Anne for your kind words about my sad poem today. Sometimes it feels exactly like this and then someone special reaches out and touches your heart and it all seems better.

[anne]

Yeah..do consider...thanks to beautiful people and our dear ones who never let us in such situation..:))