My forever waits on me

 

 

Streets glazed over in wintered frostings,

traffic lights reflect glistening hues

painting this sidewalk festive

As I walk, my breath floats before me,

not unlike a ghostly apparition,

then disappearing waiting on the next

 

Footsteps striding to the song in my head

“You and me” that is our song…

Chills converge, though not from cold,

My rapidly beating heart sings

and it stays with me, never ending in my mind,

for I dream the lyrics are her words to me

 

Changing lanes a slippery endeavor

as I cross over the hidden yellow lines

coated white beneath blurred tire tracks,

ruts, like life used to be…before her,

before winter became beautiful

and opening my eyes each day a blessing

 

Making my way to her door step,

my pulse races between each fluttering snowflake,

perhaps anticipation, perhaps nerves…

rehearsing once more,

practice makes perfect they say…

as my forever waits on me

 

Reaching in my pocket I remove the small box

lifting the lid I smile at the sparkle,

dispersing the rays of a January sun,

shimmering in my eyes,

now mesmerized by the wonder that is us…

hoping she will say yes

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[s y e]

Wow, this is so utterly gorgeous and romantic. What can I say? I hope she said yes, too!

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem.
"Making my way to her door step,
my pulse races between each fluttering snowflake,
perhaps anticipation, perhaps nerves…
rehearsing once more,
practice makes perfect they say…
as my forever waits on me"
The above words create good vision and hope for the reader. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thank you so very much my friend. I am glad you could feel what I was trying to express in this one.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem and you are welcome.

[R Smith]

excellent Will, your writing can be so uplifting and here the love and hope of a future bring joy to our hearts, a great poem for lovers everywhere :)

[willweb]

Thanks Richard. I hope it touches many hearts. There needs to be a lot more love in the world, there is far too much hate everywhere.

[Aprille]

"...as my forever waits on me..." You really are a poet Will, so sincere use of words lifting the romantic atmosphere plus the great imagery, you are telling a beautiful story. :)

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Olive for your kindness.

[Aprille]

Your welcome.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful as always, Will. Hope she will say yes. :) Rudi

[willweb]

Maybe someday Rudi...maybe. :) Thanks so very much

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

As I read this, the third stanza is my favorite because it grabs me attention with your details.
There is hope and promise inside this
and I am left to ponder the ending.
Mesmerized on the title of it.

[willweb]

Thank so much Josie. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

YOU ARE WELCOME! :)

[anne]

Changing lanes a slippery endeavor
as I cross over the hidden yellow lines
coated white beneath blurred tire tracks,
ruts, like life used to be…before her,
before winter became beautiful
and opening my eyes each day a blessing...
Your unique writing style and such a flow in poetry is really amazing...:))

[willweb]

Thank you so much Anne. I appreciate your kindness

[Lydia Shutter]

"as my forever waits on me" A line filled with so much hope. I could see him walking to her doorstep with anticipation. The snow may be falling, but he feels very warm when he thinks of her. You have described the scene with splendid imagery and honest emotion. I like this a lot....so romantic. Lydi**

[willweb]

Thank you Lydi. It is always nice when you stop by. I appreciate your kindness

[MomzillaNC]

Lovely… :D

[willweb]

Thank you so much.

[MomzillaNC]

yw :)

[The Black Warrior]

I can't really chose a favorite line, for everything was right on...the emotion was mark/painted perfectly in every stanza...this is very sweet, romantic. I love your wording....I just loved it...What can I say? hahaha

[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend for these wonderful comments on my poem. I'm just a hopeless romantic I suppose...emphasis on hopeless. :)

[The Black Warrior]

hahaha I know what you mean Will! :D for so am I....and you are very welcome...the pleasure is all mine ;))

[The Black Warrior]

I enjoy reading your poems my friend...thank you for sharing your wonderful work ;)