As time races ~ as time slows

 

As time races

Railway metronome clicks

Staring out of high rise glass

Mingling in snowflake laced dreams

And skyline adventures chilled in grays

A fresh cup filled to ease cold winds whistling

Her thoughts now percolate in warmth induced questions

Watching the rising sun alone…in shadows of the day’s desires

Keys tapped as beauty evolves from beauty within

Sweet words to caress a distant heart

The call of poetic breezes sifts softly

In echoes of pleasure’s pace

As time slows

 

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Days and nights of silhouettes

And long forgotten past regrets

Now fall behind a distant wayward star

 

And as this morning wakes your skies

So pleasing fore the tired eyes

These miles claim to be right where you are

 

 

~

As time slows

Neath star laced canopies

Staring at the dark pre-dawn sky

Breathing in the quiet remnant thoughts

Counting traffic light colors in vast array

Navigating the rhythm of asphalt destinations

Longing for that first glimpse of lemon zest glow

Rising with the sun, alone…in shadows of the day’s desires

His mind escaping down two lane mediums

Restarting his heart while distant dreams call

Sending the morning’s sweet greeting

Dancing before his needy eyes

As time races…

 

 

Reviews

[R Smith]

gotta love that Will, the start and the end are fantastic but the middle is absolutely amazing! In my library and one of your best ever poems, a real beaut :)

[willweb]

Wow Richard, thank you for your kindness today. I appreciate your comments.

[Dannyisawriter]

My favorite part was the middle!!!

[willweb]

That's what she said...no wait, did I say that out loud? Thanks so much my friend.

[Ana B.]

Beautiful.Romantic.Intense.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Ana B.

[Ana B.]

You're very welcome Will.

[Einstein Noodle]

i think this must have taken a good deal of thought and time.. just in the story line and concept .. stimulating the noodle .. the love story is creative romantic longing ... not easy to include male and female perspectives says i .. how can one know the other ;) ... i love the change up in the middle two verses .. the switches in time ... what a unique and well worked poem .. would not change a thing ..very creative
E.

[willweb]

Thank so very much E for this wonderful and humbling review of my poem. I am thrilled you enjoyed this.

[anne]

I loved the concept....
Days and nights of silhouettes
And long forgotten past regrets
Now fall behind a distant wayward star
my favorite...its so smooth,proflusive ...was a pleasure to read...:))

[willweb]

Thank you Anne, so very much.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful poem, I like the form of it. Talking about love and longing. It's love for sure. Very good, Will. Gladd you shared this. :) Rudi

[willweb]

Thank you Rudi for your nice comments

[Lyn Anderson]

I like the form of this, and the contrast between the racing and the slowing, well done.

[willweb]

Thanks so very much KL.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Romance in a folorn guise as the romantically smitten are so far apart and watch as time moves on. Romantic never-the-less.

[willweb]

Smitten, now there's a word I haven't heard in a while. Thanks so much John. I appreciate your visit today.

[Matching Socks]

Very cool format here, as if telling two sides of the story time one picking up where the other ends with time slowing, to show different perspectives. Gorgeous poem with lovely thoughts laced with love and longing.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Ana. I am thrilled you liked this one. Just trying something a little different.

[s y e]

I adore the structure of this one and the message within, a powerful write for sure, Will. You sure know how to write an excellent poem and grip the readers, love it!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Noodlebumble for this nice review of my poem. I appreciate your kind thoughts.