The first hint

 

I walked out to my gate

and was shocked to find

the clasp unfastened

 

It swung freely on its hinges

as if it had not a care

to whom might enter or leave

 

I looked out towards the horizon

across the wintered over field,

a stark white silent landscape

 

I saw nothing but barren trees with

twisted branches creaking,

silhouettes reaching on an opaque sky

 

I felt scared and nervous…

what would happen now that the entryway

to my heart had been left open

 

Then I felt a hand on my shoulder,

and looking to my right, there you were,

smiling a sunrise on my face

 

So I pulled the gate closed,

secured it tightly as I felt the first

hint of spring in your kiss

 

 

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Such a deeply romantic piece that simply captivates.

[willweb]

Thanks so much John.

[Confuser]

This is quite beautiful. You do well at writing, especially love poetry. I so enjoyed the imagery and the journey all the way through. It flowed quite well. Maybe sometimes as people speak of "meter" it's not perfect, but I truly do not care. The journey to the kiss and the metaphors were wonderful. Thank you, I loved it!

[willweb]

Thanks so much Dale. I only try to use metered lines when I write something that rhymes.

[Confuser]

I'm still learning...............this is great...........................Dale

[R Smith]

really good poem Will, the gate symbolism of your heart is a genius stroke and Hey! you got that kiss at last!! bravo :)

[willweb]

Thanks so much Richard. Yeah I figured the only way I was going to get it would be to write it myself.

[s y e]

This is utterly gorgeous, Will. Wow, I so loved this one, you took my breath away.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Noodlebumble for this wonderful review.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Beautiful metaphor, the fence open, the entryway to your heart open...first hint of spring in your kiss. I love it all, it's melancholic and nostalgic and still full of hope. Well done. :)

Rudi

[Ma'at]

this is so lovely and romantic, what is it with metaphor on this site ? sigh. well i should learn to do it a lot more, ha my writing is s**t compared to yours :) . this was great, your imagery was very nicely written and i love the story embedded in it as well. great job x

[willweb]

Oh come on now...everyone has their own style of writing my friend. Your poetry is not s**t by any stretch of the imagination. I love your work. You need to be you, not me or anyone else. That is what makes us all unique. Thank you for your kind words. I am thrilled you liked this one

[Ma'at]

thank you very much x you are a great person...i would love to be your friend. anyway, of course

[Matching Socks]

Gosh, this is so very romantic. When love finds you, definitely hang on to it!
Love this one Will, so much.

[willweb]

Ana, I am always smiling when you come to visit. I find your poetry so romantically beautiful, to have you say the same about mine is a thrill. Thank you so very much. You humble me with your comments.

[Matching Socks]

Oh please... Yours is tops Will. Easily. But thank you. :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Aww, how wonderfully sweet and romantic. See, I even said that without choking. Bitter? No, not at all :)

[willweb]

Ok, I'm laughing now...but not too much. :) Thank so much my friend.

[Lyn Anderson]

laugh some more. http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/amendoim1988/1448619/