The first hint

 

I walked out to my gate

and was shocked to find

the clasp unfastened

 

It swung freely on its hinges

as if it had not a care

to whom might enter or leave

 

I looked out towards the horizon

across the wintered over field,

a stark white silent landscape

 

I saw nothing but barren trees with

twisted branches creaking,

silhouettes reaching on an opaque sky

 

I felt scared and nervous…

what would happen now that the entryway

to my heart had been left open

 

Then I felt a hand on my shoulder,

and looking to my right, there you were,

smiling a sunrise on my face

 

So I pulled the gate closed,

secured it tightly as I felt the first

hint of spring in your kiss

 

 

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

what a pretty gentle little poem. exquisite metaphoric treatment of love.

[The Black Warrior]

I love your choice of words! you captured my attention from the beginning to the ned. I love the last line! It made me smile :))

Beautifully Done Will

[willweb]

Thanks so much Suk. I am happy you liked this one

[The Black Warrior]

I love your work and you know that! :D LOL I enjoy reading your work!

[Pryde Foltz]

Then I felt a hand on my shoulder,
and looking to my right, there you were,
smiling a sunrise on my face

So I pulled the gate closed,
secured it tightly as I felt the first
hint of spring in your kiss

Spring … well you certainly brought the blossoms in December. A wonderfully romantic write with enticing light.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Pryde. I am happy to see your smile on my page again.

[Rene Salinas]

I was suprised to find that I actually really do feel like this sometimes and as soon as you found that door open I went" Oh no what have you done! DearLord " " What my come in now?" obviously my fears and yours differ so when the image of her coming in served to me a a relief. If it woudn't have been in my leterary world I Darkness would have walked all over me with pleasure but the sunrise in your face as a form of awakening and light. Reassuring to say the least. Good job though you shut that door quickly!

Pheww that to me a close call.

Thankyou

[willweb]

Thanks so very much for this wonderful review of my work Rene. Yes, I suppose darkness could have walked through that gate as well...but not this time. :)

[singingtree]

well written, very beautiful.
enjoyed the rhythm and sound to it

[willweb]

Thank you so much Singing tree. I apreciate your kind words.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

I read this aloud and it is so beautiful!
Wonderful scenes unfolding, and lovely ending!
Well penned.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Josie for this nice review. I am thrilled you liked this one.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!

[KWP]

that's way too lovely for me - show me the raw, gritty reality of life anyday - that's where the lessons are .... yeah I know - apologies - my brain don't work like most ... xxx

[willweb]

Everyone is different, that's what makes life so fun. But, a little lovely isn't so bad every once in a while...is it? Thanks for visiting KWP.

[KWP]

you are right of course it's not ... :) xx

[Marie]

That's rather sweet. A kiss should always taste of spring. When it begins to taste like winter, things are over...

[willweb]

I know what you mean Marie. Thanks so much for your nice comments

[Lydia Shutter]

When you meet the right "one" it is suddenly springtime....the world blossoms and the colors burst forth. How romantic this is, Will. Lovely. Lydi**

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Lydi. It sure seems that way.

[Samuel Pennell]

Very nice. The best line, in my opinion, is

"smiling a sunrise on my face"

I love wordings that are a little off from proper grammar like that. Also, the idea of using "smiling" as a verb that takes an object is very creative and beautiful. Great work! Love the opaque sky imagery, too! Thank you so much for sharing, my friend! God bless you!

[willweb]

Thank you so much for these nice comments. I appreciate you stopping by.