Damn sun

Another rainy day,

drops falling from grey skies

running down my cheeks

like tears

 

but

 

Where was this rain

when you left me

and I was crying

and didn’t want you to know

 

Damn sun

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

for sure. this one gets a head nod from me.

[Confuser]

How sweet and honest Will. I always love your poetry.. so honest and always clever. Thank you. Dale

[willweb]

Thanks Dale. I try to express my feelings when I write...good or bad.

[Confuser]

You do it quite well.

[therisa]

Am reminded of a song, by The Cure, called, "From The Edge Of Deep Green Sea", a very melodic, but sad song. Actually, one of my favourite songs, on the Wish cd. Yeah, am feeling very melancholy, today. And yes, you poem has moved, just not the direction, I thought.

[willweb]

Thanks Therisa...I wish it had made you smile.

[therisa]

It's ok, Will. Some days are like this.

[The Black Warrior]

This is beautiful! Using the rain to cover your own pain, feeling/emotion. Nicely done!

[willweb]

Thanks so much Suk for your kind words today.

[Ma'at]

i like the metaphor and the imagery very much in this, you have a beautiful talent of saying so much in so little words that's just amazing :) x

[willweb]

Thanks so very much my friend. I am happy you enjoyed this one.

[R Smith]

you sure are a loser in love Will (join the club by the way) even the sun would not let you hide your tears but it did give you a great poem bravo :)

[willweb]

Thanks Richard...hey, everyone has to be something. Sometimes even winners are losers. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

its so eternally universal ... love it .. love the alley oop! ;) .. here is a blast from the past .. (sorry .. i am an old guy:) ... what a great little emotive piece your poem is for me!! love it!
black and white can be such a glorious thing eh!??!
http://youtu.be/xM7BRP7uzFk
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[willweb]

Thanks so much my friend. I'm thrilled you enjoyed this and I hope that chute opens. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

well .. thank you and God above it did! :)))

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

I have this thing about funerals. When the sun shines on those days I can't understand, why in God's heaven let the sun shine on such days. When I heard how many people die every day I understand...
Very good. :)

Rudi

[willweb]

Thanks Rudi. Yeah, I believe someone dies everyday...it would be a gloomy world if the weather matched those numbers.

[Lyn Anderson]

I love it. Sometimes it is like this. We want a gloomy day to match the pain. Nearly every funeral I have ever gone to the weather was gorgeous. And I guess fate knew better than me when I got married in a cold snap and honeymooned in a blizzard. Probably wasn't a good sign of what was to come.

[willweb]

Thank you so much KLGoode. Yeah, you just can't trust the weather, now can you?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You set the atmosphere in the first few lines of this poignant piece Will and its pathos was palpable as you reflect on showing emotions you would rather have hidden away.

[willweb]

Thanks so much John. I'm glad you enjoyed this one today.