Falling

 

 

I watched you fall,

spinning out of control

on a gusty northern wind

beneath clouded skies,

twisting and turning,

eluding my outstretched hands

as I tried to save you

from those who had fallen before

piled in silent thoughts,

returning to where they began,

but I was too slow

 

You watched me fall,

you didn't try to catch me  

Author's Note

Just barging into the leaf challenge...

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

Wow, nicely done. I don't know what challenge this is but I love the poem.
Love does spin us out of control sometimes. Someone, some day, will catch you.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Ana. I don't really know what challenge it is either, but I read a poem that was written to a challenge to write a poem about a leaf and I just invited myself in. :)

[Matching Socks]

Ahhh, I see. Party crasher...

[willweb]

I just thought maybe my invitation got lost in the mail and I didn't want to disappoint anyone.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Tornadoes are such strange and awesome creatures...wreaking havoc even if they set us down gently

[willweb]

Especially when the touch down on our hearts. Thanks so much Queenie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

like trying to catch a leaf....she falls just out of reach with her spinning and weaving...
but the love was not mutual...she just let you fall...

[willweb]

Seems that's the way it goes sometimes Jacob. Thanks so much

[The Black Warrior]

Wow, this is beautiful! You captured the moment perfectly; love the description...the imagery is great!

You watched me fall,

you didn't try to catch me

That was "BAM" ending! I loved it! ;~)

[willweb]

Thank you so much for this nice review. I am thrilled you liked this one.

[The Black Warrior]

The imagery was excellent, nicely done ;)

[MomzillaNC]

Great answer to the challenge. Anyone who's ever chased a leaf as it tumbled free of it's branches knows this scene. But, I was intrigued by the melancholy turn of your ending lines.

[willweb]

Thank you so much for this kind review of my work. Yeah I know the ending saddened it up a bit, that is the way at fall at times. I am happy you liked it.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.