If tears were poetry

If tears were poetry,

my words would flow

in a constant stream

onto the dampened paper,

running together in a blur

of forever promises

and hopes for futures

 

But alas they are merely

salt stained lines

in sorrowed cursive fonts,

drenched in phrased sadness,

falling from my eyes,

flooding the cracks

of my broken heart

 

If tears were poetry~

I would be a poet

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

an ache of a poem. I've become such a hardened old thing. Perhaps a dragon. No tears here. but this poem if I were one to cry would make me weep with emotion.

[anne]

lovely...they are precious tears...your imagination is so vivid, clear and appealing..loved it..:))

[willweb]

Thank you for your kindness Anne.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

I loved the imagery and the feel of this.... I especially loved the ending

[willweb]

Thank you so much Rico.

[Rita L. Sev]

Sometimes tears are the most persistent Muse... a beautiful and touching poem here, Will.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Rita.

[therisa]

How can I, critique something, which is, so right, beyond sighing. Hoping, someday, I can write something, like this. If I'm lucky. Thank you, Willweb, for sharing this poem, with us.

[willweb]

Thank you Therisa for your nice words.

[therisa]

Your welcome, Willweb.

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

But alas they are merely

salt stained lines

in sorrowed cursive fonts,

drenched in phrased sadness,

falling from my eyes,

flooding the cracks

of my broken heart



If tears were poetry~

I would be a poet



Lovely my friend so elegant and beautiful.



Thank you for sharing.




Blessings. Benita

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Benita. I am happy you enjoyed this one.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

I found this through the contest Emotions you have felt. I sent the admin a message asking about the group but no answer back :( I was wanting to know more about it. thank you for sharing. Blessings. Benita

[Moonie]

The last line just takes the cake [with semantic icing, and consonant cherries no less!!]
ps, forgive me, if I am wrong, but did you mean "[hopes] for future"?

[willweb]

You are correct and thank you so much, I have made that change. I don't know how that slipped past me...must have been my blurred vision. :)

[Eleanor]

I liked your use of simili. Your flow was smooth and easy to understand. Well who would understand a poet well than the poet itslef? :p
This is a beautiful writing. I liked it :)

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for these nice words.

[June Fowler]

ur thoughts r very good. U express well, only thing is, that this poem of urs has an abrupt end. c how u can build on it and end it with a soft touch. Love to read more of ur stuff. Keep posting. Regards.

[willweb]

Thanks so much June. Abrupt endings seem to be my forte.