Wishing well

Standing here with empty pockets,

my last penny tossed in the well

Made a wish just before it hit water,

listened for the splash

then had a sinking feeling

 

Kicking a stone at the base

I saw my life roll down the hill

Would this be my last wish,

my final chance to win you back

I have no more pennies,

I have no more luck

 

Should I wait,

basing my existence on a myth

or follow that rope

holding the old galvanized bucket

and accept the fact

that change changes nothing

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Sad one Will, ending came as a surprise, wishes coming true are almost like the value of passing pennies now when we're feeling so dispirited.

[willweb]

You can say that agan. Thank you so much Frieda P.

[Einstein Noodle]

killer ending lines .. damn! change changes nothing .. your poem put me in the throes of iron anguish .. been there .. don't ever want to repeat .. can understand the reprieve the rope might bring ugh! tough stuff! :)
E.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much E.

[R Smith]

haha love that last line but don't go down the rope with your luck you just know someone will cut it soon as you hit the bottom....come on Will we've all seen the movie :)

[willweb]

I think they already did. Thanks so much Richard

[Matching Socks]

Oh for heaven sake Will! :)
You're much too charming and sweet to feel so down.
Here... Take my penny, I don't need it anymore.
It's choc-ful o' good luck. Promise.
At least that's what the magic that enchanted it told me...

[willweb]

Thank you so much Ana.

[AprilRN1210]

awwww, went from making me swoon to bittersweet reality hitting me like that stone... again, really enjoyed the phrasing in this one. the last stanza is actually my favorite.. the imagery and emotion were pretty vivid and powerful in this one. I think that a lot of us can relate to sentiments expressed so beautifully here. another awesome write.. well done!

[willweb]

Thank you so much April

[Lyn Anderson]

Should I be happy or sad that the Will I first met is very evident in this piece. A very effective poem about love lost.

[willweb]

Thank you so much KLGoode

[Pryde Foltz]

Should I wait,
basing my existence on a myth
or follow that rope
holding the old galvanized bucket
and accept the fact
that change changes nothing

When you love someone, truly, there is nothing changing that. I hear you loud and clear on this one.

[willweb]

Thank you Pryde