Clear enough?

In common everyday,

heard on the street,

in the food court or

around the office, words

 

Spoken in non-counted syllables

arranged only as they fall

No poetic fluff or flowery phrases,

fancy fonts or paisley patterns

 

Without inserting a sunrise

or the fragrance of lavender

Not one single hummingbird

floating on a dream whispered breeze

 

I want to say to you

in the most easily understood way,

sans the metaphors, rhymes

and suggestive sentences

 

I love you more than anything

and I always will

 

Clear enough?

Reviews

[Moonie]

This has to be one of my favourite poems on Writer's café. I love the second stanza...
Behind flowery language, poor translations, and mixed metaphors, there is always a crystal clear meaning to be found, and behind a crystal clear thought, there are always metaphors, labyrinths and "paisley patterns" to be uncoded.

[willweb]

Now that is a wonderful and humbling compliment, thank you so very much.

[AprilRN1210]

wow... this one hit me... always feel like people say things they want me to hear, or try to be flowery, or clever, or funny, instead of just being real... sometimes, I just want simple, heartfelt, and honest... is that too much to ask?.. I don't think so.. I got lost in the words and the flow had me hanging on each line to see where you were going, and the ending came out of nowhere.. BANG! right in the heart... bullseye... clear! and powerful.. oh my goodness... has me swooning, and I never swoon.. ok, maybe I did a little after your butterflies piece... between the two of them, I am a fan sir... well done!!

[willweb]

Now that is what I would call a beautiful review. Thank you so very much April for this wonderful and humbling gift I have found waiting for me. I am more than thrilled you enjoyed this one.

And no, that is not too much to ask. I believe a lot of time is wasted trying to impress someone with our vocabulary when all they really want to hear is, I love you.

[AprilRN1210]

exactly!!!! I am actually more of a show me don't tell me kinda girl.. but love simple truth as much as I love flowery words.. there is a time for one, and a time for the other... you are more than welcome.. I meant every word...

[s y e]

Will, you truly are amazing. I agree with what Kelly has said, there are certain things we need to say/express to one another every day... Absolutely gorgeous.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Noodlehead. I am happy you liked this one

[Kelly Scheppers]

Those are the words we need to express to each other, more and more every day...with consistency and clarity.

Wonderfully said, Will!

[willweb]

Thank you Kelly for always being so nice to me. I am thrilled you read this poem and liked it. That makes me smile.

[kublakhan27]

I love stanza three...I'm always hoping I'll detect some of those fragrances and dreams when I'm out and about, but I can barely understand what anyone is saying through the motormouth bluster of our local accent...then again, I couldn't care less about what most people in my town have to say haha I always relate to your work on some level, and usually many, and in this case it made me all too aware of my hesitance to say anything directly...I have this compulsive need to be cryptic, and find the most complicated way to express the simplest things...but yes, sometimes we just have to spit it out, especially when it comes to the emotions you relay here...well done as always my friend.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Kublakhan27. I too have danced around meanings and painted abstract words trying to hide but show my thoughts, if that makes any sense. I just decided this time to be direct. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love this...it reminds me of short story i teach, "everyday use" by alice walker...

Mama tells the story...she has only a 2nd grade education...no flare for words, she tells it like it is...

maybe poets are too flowery sometimes...and someone needs to hear the bare truth with the barest amount of words.

wonderful piece.

jacob

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Jacob. Coming from you this means so much to me.

[Lyn Anderson]

Wow. If somebody said that to me, I might just have to learn to fall in love. Amazing.

[willweb]

I think there is a class forming right now - in case you are interested? Thank you KLGoode. I always smile when you stop by.

[Madalyn Beck]

Crystal clear! This is lovely, Will, and it couldn't have been better myself. xo :)

[willweb]

Thank you Madalyn for your nice comments today. I am happy you liked this one.