Monochrome opposite

What seems black and white,
common as -
piano keys beneath nimble fingers,
candle shadows dancing on an
opaque drawn blind,
blurred highway lines dotted
on fresh asphalt -

is really the reflection of my racing pulse
upon pearl painted skies
every time you walk by -
in living color

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

Why so sad Will?This was beautiful and your words haunting to read.Lost love and a broken heart as only you can pen my dear friend.Really great as usual :)

[willweb]

Thank you Vidya so much. Your nice reviews always mean so much to me.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Will :)

[Frieda P]

I love this, you've painted in different hues of sadness Will, amazing imagery.

[willweb]

Thank you so much again Frieda P. for your nice words to me today. And thank you for placing this in your favorites, that means a lot to me.

[Christopher Robin]

"Will, it pains me to say,
I gain from your display,
The same as yesterday.
It's a shame to relay."

I've read a few of your poems now, including the one currently leading the competition. There's an obvious thematic pattern : loss, depression, unobtainable love. The dichotomy of your obvious talent versus your inner demons in a battle of expression is intriguing, but overplayed. As with most of the material posted on this site, you prefer prose over poetry and who can blame you? Why place rules on art? My issue is this: people who feel sad and write sad things will be acknowledged and upvoted by sad people who write sad things with less talent.

I see how you affect your followers, and noteworthy though the piece may be, it adds to the cycle of shared feelings of depression, the black hole of which I feel this site being gradually pulled toward. I would love to see someone with your talent uplift and inspire people. Add to the game and be forgotten, change the game and be immortalized.

I look forward to seeing what you become, Will.

-Christopher Robin

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Christopher Robin. Just so you know, I am not depressed, rather a pretty happy guy most of the time and about a third of my poems on here are happy love poems. I try to write in different themes and obviously the ones you have chosen to read are the broken heart depressing poems. But I will take your advice to heart and perhaps lean a little more towards the lighter side of life. Thanks again for reading and commenting on my poem today.

[Rene Salinas]

Sometimes we rather deal with light and darkness at least for me it makes it easier to appreciate colour when we drive them world of opposties. And the wolrd of sound which is the world I can reletae the most blac and white are replaced evr so slightly by the word silence and sound? No I am afraid . And Willy has in this writing and very enigmatic and therefore extremely appealing bowed to this engma which when I am not bounded by mediocrity and the mundane consumes my time. The piano is knows as the devil box. I know strange isn't it is becuase the chrome or colours if you wish is presented in full, the candle light is not even there although we perceive it to be, even the most concrete of offerings in this writings are but impressions concucted by our mid. However how beautyfull it is when love warms the abscence of it and transforms eithr state out of a loving desire?

An enigma so worth loving

Thankyou

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Rene for this in depth review of my little poem. I am pleased you found enjoyment in this piece.

[Lyn Anderson]

This poem makes me feel like the speaker feels inadequate up against his love -- it is sad really, but truthful just the same.

[willweb]

You read it correctly KLGoode. It just feels that way. Thank you for your nice comments.

[Pryde Foltz]

is really the refection of my racing pulse
upon pearl painted skies
every time you walk by -
in living color

Loved the contrast between these two stanzas … really helped the second hit home.

PS … a bit of a typo in the first line above.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Pryde. Yes, a typo, but thanks to you and Jacob, it is fixed. I am happy you enjoyed this one.

[Kelly Scheppers]

I was mesmerized, then power punched by your closing line...love it!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Kelly. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

did you mean "reflection"? I read it as that.

I just love the contrast of black and white to color in this.
"kodachrome, it gives those nice bright colors---"

the common becomes uncommon...love like this, rare..

beautiful write.

your imagery is always astounding.

[willweb]

Thank you Jacob for your fantastic review of my work. I suppose that is what I was going for. You humble me with your nice comments as you are one of my favorite poets here

[Matching Socks]

Wow, what a beautiful ending!
The person who makes you FEEL.
Really liked this one from you!

[willweb]

Ana, thank you so much for your friendship and this wonderful review. I am excited you enjoyed this.

[Matching Socks]

Awwww, I saw the happy ending but it was a sad ending.
Optimist/pessimist
I'm the former...

[willweb]

So you examine eyes?

[willweb]

Sorry...yes happy or unhappy endings...endings come

[Matching Socks]

Lol. Funny. :)

[Frontier]

Ahhhhhhh! Love that last stanza, love it!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Frontier for these nice words. Happy you liked this one