Mean Seas

 

 

You are the mean seas

which rock my vessel

from side to side

tossing my heart overboard

conspiring with the circling sharks

 

Tormenting me with a life preserver,

two arches formed of painted smiles

and suggested feelings

Waving it amongst laughter

and first mate chuckles

 

My sails lack wind,

my course altered from its design

Taking on water

drowning, slowly drowning

in the meanest of seas

 

Bobbing amidst the waves,

raging above and below

where your anchor sits in wait of me,

in wait of my submersion,

in wait of my final breath

 

What was once my love,

this sea, endless beauty, aquatic charm

serenity within my arms

is now my end -

 

How could you be so mean?

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

love the metaphor .. you carry it throughout .. nice job! packed with feelings ... up and down and up and down .. sea sickness overtakes ... mean mean mean .. it is terribly mean to be toyed with by cold hearts ... may Davey Jones take and keep them ...
E.

[willweb]

Thanks so much again E. Yes sir, those seas can get very angry at times.

[Moonie]

I pray for your safe journey!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much.

[s y e]

The ending is so bitter but the metaphor was outstanding. What a completely mind blowing piece, Will.

[willweb]

Thank you for sailing with me today Noodlehead. Happy you enjoyed the trip.

[Kayleigh]

Will this is out of this world. I cannot tell you how much I loved this one, the imagery and wording is outstanding and blew me away.

[willweb]

Kayleigh, thank you so very much for always leaving such nice comments for me. I am glad you liked this one.

[just Penny]

This is stark and dramatic. The theme of mean seas works so very well throughout and the use of repetition adds impact to the poem. Humans do mistreat each other and subject one another to the vilest of things. I have no explanation why. I am guessing though that you are a strong swimmer :) Great poem. Penny

[willweb]

Thank you so much Penny for this wonderful review of my work. I am a good swimmer as long as someone is not pushing me under. Happy you enjoyed this one today.

[Frieda P]

Excellent metaphor Will, it worked all the way to the bitter end...your poem was making me seasick, we can all relate it seems...sending you a lifeline.

[willweb]

Thanks for the wonderful review and the lifeline Frieda P. I have some extra dramamine if you need some.

[Cory Barrett]

some body through the speaker a life vest, taking on water!

[willweb]

Can they throw some scotch too...please? Thanks so very much Cory.

[Rita L. Sev]

You are the mean seas... What a brilliant and apt metaphor for the one who causes so much turmoil in our lives. Really well penned, Will.

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Rita for your nice review today. I am happy you liked this one.

[anne]

very well structured poem with a message inside....good job... :))

[willweb]

Thank you Anne for your nice words. I am happy you liked this one.