Bad News

I stand at the window waiting,

slightly parted curtains

Watching the day go by

in the slowest possible way

 

Leaning against the glass,

breathing heart shaped fog

on the center pane -

reflecting my thoughts

 

The neighbors are watering their lawn

Oh great, they see me

Hi, Charlie, hey Susie

nice lawn - they can’t hear me

 

You should be home by now,

pulling into the driveway

Waving at me in rhythm 

with the signal lamp flashing

 

I can’t wait to see your smile

through the smeared windshield

I can feel my heart beating

right now - faster

 

Where are you, it’s late

Wish you would hurry,

I have some bad news,

you’re not going to be happy

 

I broke the urn today

that held your ashes

and I can’t seem to

bring myself to clean it up

 

All over your favorite carpet,

I know you are going to be upset

but you will understand,

you always understand

 

Another day and you

didn’t make it home again

I wish you’d come home

I’ll be back at this window tomorrow -

 

I love you

 

 

Reviews

[Cassie]

Will, how is it that you are able to make your readers feel the pain in your poem...I love how you have portrayed this emotion here...this is really good. Keep writing my friend, you are highly talented.

[willweb]

Thank you once again Cassie for your nice words to me today. I am thrilled you felt this one, even if it was sad.

[Ally Monique]

oh my god this poem really pulled my heart strings, man I'm so sad now :(
I think that's a good thing though, the characters pain leaked through the letters.
Gladly, I can't relate to this, but I find this poem absolutely beautiful
"Another day and you
didn’t make it home again
I wish you’d come home"

[willweb]

Ally, I am so sorry for my delay in thanking you for your nice words about my poem. I am always thrilled when you stop by.

[Norah]

I really like this poem because I can relate to it, great job.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Norah, I am so sorry you can relate but happy this one touched you.

[Rita L. Sev]

A wonderfully rich scene and an emotional write, Will. This touches the soul of all who have loved and lost...

[willweb]

Thank you so much Rita. Your wonderful review has made me smile.

[Frieda P]

My goosebumps have shivers...straight through the heart this one Will. Sigh....

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Frieda P. This was a hard one to write but I am happy you enjoyed it. Thank you for saving it to your favorites.

[Frieda P]

I can imagine, I felt it too...was my pleasure Will.

[s y e]

Ah Will, this brought tears to my eyes and breaks my heart. I'm at a loss for words at the moment my friend, you have completely rendered me speechless. Such a powerful poem.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Noodlehead for your kind comments this morning. Don't cry - please?

[MsJewel]

After my sweetheart passed away, I would see something on the news, or something would happen at work, and I couldn't wait to tell him...and then I would remember....Your poem reminded me of the pain that takes the place of the the empty spaces in your heart when you lose someone...
Truly a touching piece of work my friend. I felt every single word.

Julie

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Julie. I am sorry for your loss and that this brought back those memories for you but I am happy you took the time to read and comment. This feeling does hurt, how something so empty can hurt is beyond me, but it does.

[Einstein Noodle]

can't tell how this breaks my heart .. what a powerful poem .. saving it for sure .. i felt every nuance :((
E.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much E. I am happy you liked this one and thank you for saving it to your favorites.

[A. Amos]

Memories and past are our true partners in our lonely days...poignant and great write!

[willweb]

Thank you so much A. Amos for this nice review.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome