Just a shell

I walk along this quiet beach collecting sea shells -

it was something you loved to do

We would spend hours strolling the soft sand,

searching for nature’s pristine treasures

That look on your face when you found the perfect one,

your smile, wide beautiful eyes when showing it to me

You always said you could hear my heart beat

when you held it to your ear

 

Still I walk along this quiet beach collecting sea shells,

though all that I find now are broken -

as is my heart, which you no longer want to hear

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

As always Will your words always touch me,Losing someone does not mean you stop missing or loving them.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Vidya. I am always happy to see you here.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Will :)

[Ally Monique]

I agree with Rita! Great scenery. It's hard to do things you used to do with a lover and not think about them
it's "just a shell" to everyone else, but much more to someone who gave it meaning.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Ally. Your nice words are my gift today.

[Rita L. Sev]

It really is the simple things that can make or break us. You show the scene perfectly, and the emotion comes through. Excellent, Will.

[willweb]

Rita, thank you for always being so nice to me. I am happy you liked this.

[Cassie]

This is quite sad Will, I like the way you brought out this sad emotion..

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Cassie. Yes sad does happen when you are alone.

[Lyn Anderson]

I tried to click on a couple while they were still in progress, thanks for sending. A very sad piece, with lovely images.

[willweb]

Thanks so much again KLGoode. It is always a pleasure when you stop by.

[Kayleigh]

~~ That look on your face when you found the perfect one,
your smile, wide beautiful eyes when showing it to me
You always said you could hear my heart beat
when you held it to your ear ~~

Oh Will, this is so beautiful and yet, towards the end begins to get so very sad. You touched my heart with this one. The ending just broke my heart, we need to find someone who is going to fix your heart up and put a smile back on your face. :))

[willweb]

Either that or an unbroken seashell. :) Thank you so very much Kayleigh for your kind words today. I am thrilled you enjoyed this today.

[Diana]

"Still I walk along this quiet beach collecting sea shells,
though all that I find now are broken -
as is my heart, which you no longer want to hear"- I'm reminded of the way people put conch shells to their ear to try and hear the ocean.

The beauty of this poem is in its plaintive simplicity. Something in your tone reminds me of Poe's poem Annabel Lee; it also speaks of losing a love in a kingdom by the sea. It's one of my favorites, and yours is one of my new favorites.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for this wonderful review of my poem. I am thrilled you enjoyed this so much Diana. Thank you for saving it to your favorites.

[Matching Socks]

Beautiful write my friend.
Hope that she'll finds it's sound again.

[willweb]

Thanks Ance. Not as beautiful and uplifting as your beach poem, but sometimes it is just beach.

[Matching Socks]

Just as beautiful but maybe not quite as uplifting. : P