Disintegrated Daydreams

Disintegrated Daydreams

A Poem by willweb

 

 

Clay pot findings on old brick faces,

cemented delusions reach as I walk by,

leading down a walkway of branded desires,

chipped and scattered, dust upon the ground

 

Stepping stones that once found your smile

twist and turn in altered directions,

draining my strength, void of last rites

 

Serpentine wanderings fall off lonely ledges

At the bottom, where I now sit, I am

covered in debris of frayed heart strings

tied in knots of any undoing

 

Now dark clouds collect me, which was expected,

taking me to a final resting place,

where light fails to shine and daydreams disintegrate

 

 

and I disintegrate along with them

 

particles of the past

forgotten fragments

residual residue

dead deposits

 

 

gone

© 2014 willweb


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creative and emotive .. deep deep tragedy, loss and shock state .. nicely done says i .. especially appreciate the way your poem trails off at the end .. slows down .. and reiterates .. a very final "gone"
whew!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Einstein Noodle. I am happy you liked this one.
How inventive! This is sublime...I enjoy your poetry hon x

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Poppy for your nice words to me. I am happy you liked this one. I really enjo.. read more
Ruth

10 Years Ago

Most welcome sweetheart :) And thank you...
So that's what happens to daydreams. What a rich, imaginative piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

Thanks for this nice review KLGoode. I am happy you enjoyed it.
I understand where you are coming from with this poem my dear friend. :-)

OK. Now... Ready for this?

Disintegrated daydreams - Part 2

A lovely beautiful talented woman, smart and clever loved by all (for the hell of it we'll call her Ana) came along and swept up those particles of disintegrated stardust daydreams (Let's call these particles WillWeb for the hell of it). She deposited these in a beautiful blue clay pot, filled it with soil and planted a seed. She watered this seed and it grew into a handsome weed.
A beautiful, intelligent woman came whistling along reciting a beautiful poetic song (you know who this woman is) Anyway, she looked at that handsome weed and thought what a fine weed indeed! So she picked up the pot and carried it home thinking 'this weed is just what I need'. And the lovely Ana let out a delighful sigh, and clapped her hands as she watched them walk away. And then God called her back to her place among the angels. :-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

You got any chips or pretzels?
Matching Socks

10 Years Ago

I got Doritos... And some coca-cola. :-)
willweb

10 Years Ago

Perfect, I'll be right over.
// Serpentine wanderings fall off lonely ledges
At the bottom, where I now sit, I am
covered in debris of frayed heart strings
tied in knots of any undoing //

OMG, your imagery is completely out of this world, Willweb, I soooo loved this one. You are truly amazing on every level, well done with this one!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Noodlehead for this fantastic review of my poem. You have made me smile. I am.. read more
Wouldn't life be so much easier if there were no gray areas, at least one would know where one was at, either in the still of darkness or in the meandering light. Were there only one or the other there would be no fog to get lost in. I'm struggling with how I "feel" about this poem not because it isn't expressive , quite the contrary it's that very feeling of confusion that this poem exudes and to capture that fog I find is one of the hardest things about writing and you have done it beautifully.

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

Thank you Corset for that amazing review. I am thrilled you enjoyed this today. I, as well, struggle.. read more
Daydreams disintegrate and the world seems to come to an abrupt standstill....I pictured someone walking a pathway through a cemetery after burying a loved one. A lost love....a romance cut short.....dreams never realized. The intensity of emotion throughout your poem is wonderful. Lydi**

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Lydia. I am happy you enjoyed this one. Thank you for visiting my work.
╰☆╮ This is brilliant and deserves more reviews. Great work!╰☆╮

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Brittany for this nice review today. I am fairly new and don't know too many peopl.. read more
Your title is very on point this time, Will. :)) Excellent poem with very good, vivid imagery. Your 4th verse is out of this world. I love this one Will, well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


willweb

10 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Kayleigh for this beautiful review. Yes, I guess this title fits this time. .. read more

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Hi, I am willweb. Maybe you remember me and maybe you don't. I have been writing here on and off for years. I pop in and write and read and comment and make friends and learn new things. I enjoy maki.. more..

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