Walls, Windows and a Door

Walls, standing silent, hushed

absorbing the sorrow felt,

locking it in place with this emptiness

Windows - beyond holding

lonely streets in two lane nightmares,

asphalt stained with memories

A door, never again

will you knock on it, your smile

through the peep hole has been erased

I will not hear your laugh,

see your face, our eyes beaming,

never again hold you to my skin

No goodbye,

no warning, at least that I noticed

or wanted to find

Now just walls, windows, and a door,

all that is left to hear me,

as I weep alone in tears of -

how much I'll miss you, forever

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

this piece touch my heart because it made think of the house we once lived in when I was a kid but they tore it down to build condominiums, oh well that's life. thank you for sharing.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for your nice review. I am happy you enjoyed this.

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Memories like the fabric of a house will last a lifetime.
I liked this poem.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for your nice comments today. Happy you liked this one.

[Moonie]

The feeling of loss and sadness penetrates throughout the poem. My favourite lines would be:
"Windows - beyond holding

lonely streets in two lane nightmares,

asphalt stained with memories"

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for this kind review of my poem. I am thrilled you liked this one.

[Shirlena]

Killing me so softly this evening with short tales of lover's lost and never recovered but I am basting in the glory of it. This is so deliciously filled with want that I'm knocked over. Keep on knocking me over with your prose wil...it don't hurt.

[willweb]

Thank you Shirlena, so much for this wonderful review of my poetry. I am happy you felt this because I felt it as I wrote it and I can still feel it. I am really happy you enjoyed this.

[Rita L. Sev]

Your words share the longing, Will - you do much with such simple images.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Rita for your nice review. Simple Images / Simple mind, I think. :) Happy you enjoyed this one.

[just Penny]

The sense of desolation is strong in this poem. Upon first read, I imagined an empty house that once was filled with busy-ness, companionship, love, laughter, light. But second read made me think of inner emptiness. When we fill our lives with another and then they are ripped from us, particularly if its sudden and unexpected, it can leave immense trauma and even pathological grief. I don't believe in "never" or "forever" and I have learned that the greatest thing to do after such a terrible loss is to live the life that they can only dream of. Good luck with that and carpe diem ! Grab it now ! You have great talent. Penny

[willweb]

Thanks so much Penny for your nice omments. I wish I could tell you exactly what I was thinking when I wrote this, but it was little of each, ultimately, inner emptiness was the theme I was going for. I am glad you enjoyed this.

[A. Amos]

I love the feeling and emotion in this piece and you're very good...truly enjoyed

[willweb]

Thank you so very much A. for this nice comment. I am happy you liked this.

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome buddy...

[Lyn Anderson]

Wonderful word usage, timing, rhythm, an excellent poem.

[willweb]

Thank again for your always nice reviews KLGoode.

[Lyn Anderson]

If I didn't like them I would not say anything at all. Safer that way.:)

[J. K. Beach]

Heart-wrenching, Will! "Walls... absorbing the sorrow felt... " such a great image, (I see big blue sponges stacked up around me right now). This is lovely!

[willweb]

Big blue sponges, that's funny. Why blue? Thank you so much J.K. Beach for your nice comments.

[J. K. Beach]

I guess; because blue is so associated with sadness... (I wasn't thinking of those bright, baby blue kitchen sponges, rather dark blue slabs awash with blacks and grays, lol.) In any event, I just felt the walls had probably soaked up a mess of the sorrow. An excellent read despite my strange visual impressions.

[willweb]

I understand and kind of figured that, just wasn't sure, but I do like your visual impressions.