New Dawn

Morning fades the dark clouds,

as sunrise weaves its light

into my weary heart -

Shining hope on the edge

of a brand new dawn

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

I like what I'm hearing my brother...
Wilting will will wilt no more.
:) love it.

[willweb]

Thanks so very much Ance. Every once in a while the light gets in. I am glad you enjoyed this today.

[Matching Socks]

Very much. :)
x

[Persona]

Good title, but I would capitalise the 'D.' I like the shape of the poem. You need a comma in the first line. I like the metaphor that you were going for.

[willweb]

Done. Thank you so much.

[Persona]

Oh no, I meant a comma between fades and the. You're welcome and thank you for taking on the advice.

[willweb]

I'm sorry Persona, that doesn't make sense to me.

[Persona]

Maybe you could change the first line entirely?