Dark empty spaces

What is this dark space?

This cavernous theater of rock wall curtains

crashing down on unsuspecting tourists

Taking photographs in plaid shorts

and sweaty polos, oblivious to the ending

 

The orchestra plays in aria nightmares

Kettle drums roar beneath a thunder cloud catwalk

Sand bags pelt bit actors

running for cover far beyond the cheap seats,

collecting stale popcorn as they go

 

Windows boarded in caustic fringe work,

while laced languishing sets the pace

in shadowed stripes of bad intent

Stringing from each anchor,

the dangling horrors nesting in the rafters

 

What is the dark space?

It is my mind of armor stud rusting

Scraping the walls of residual panic,

a dead skin pathway falls to the stairwell

as I empty it for something new

 

Stand clear those who would frown,

this soon vacant place will fill with joy

Breathing new life into thoughts and ideas,

phrases in whimsical whitewash shall live

and my smile will return to where it belongs

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

A very nice poem Will.Really excellent lines :)

[willweb]

Thank you Vidya for always being so nice to me. I am happy you liked this one.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome my friend :)

[s y e]

Holy moly wow, Will! You have some amazing metaphors in not only this poem but a lot of them. This was amazing and loved the ending... A happy way to end.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Noodlehead. I am happy you liked this.

[MsJewel]

running for cover far beyond the cheap seats,
collecting stale popcorn as they go
Wonderful use of metaphor in this well written piece. I really love the uplifting ending as well. As always, a delight to read your poetry.

:) Julie

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Julie for taking the time to read and leaving such nice comments. I am glad you liked this.

[Lyn Anderson]

Great imagery, and powerful writing.

[willweb]

Thank you so much for this nice comment. I am glad you liked this.

[lady sunshine]

another amazing work from you.... :)

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Lady Sunshine. Your nice comments make me smile

[Pryde Foltz]

What is this dark space?
This cavernous theater of rock wall curtains
crashing down on unsuspecting tourists
Taking photographs in plaid shorts
and sweaty polos, oblivious to the ending

We must dive down deep to find what none as found before. Love the metaphor work.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Pryde for this nice comment. I am more than happy you enjoyed this.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

You're very welcome. It's my pleasure always. Blessings. Kindred poet

[Corset]

I especially enjoyed the last stanza, there is something to be said for whimsical whitewash as well as the dark spaces that crowd your anchors. I think smiles belong to everyone, and that they be dispensed freely as often as we can .

[Matching Socks]

Yes, I love a happy ending. :)
Great job Will.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Ance. I am excited you stopped by and liked this one.

[kublakhan27]

I was very intrigued by the dangling horrors nesting in the rafters, it seems to cover the spirit of the piece, the ominous feel of danger being around every turn...I relate to the visions of your armored mind in many ways...great work willweb.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Kublakhan27 for your nice comments. I am happy you enjoyed this one.