All of me

All of me

 

We strolled -

When laughter turned to mud,

roots found solace on mountain tops

and treading tears was a fad

 

We held hands -

as carousels spun sideways,

stars collected on door mats

and silence hurt our ears

 

We smiled -

When Saturdays became Mondays,

gardens were carved of granite

and songbirds chirped in Cantonese

 

We laughed -

When bologna was fruit flavored,

pink was the color of death

and bones broke sticks and stones

 

We split -

When you found all of this

made more sense than dealing

with all of me

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

I really like the structure of this one. I'd call it a litany. A list of it that happened. Were you guys eating shrooms together? Psychedelic poetry! I like it!

[willweb]

Thanks again William for your nice comments and for bringing the past back to me.

[Moonie]

Amazing flow and imagery. The words connect beautifully. Thanks for bringing the poem to my attention. :))

[willweb]

Thank you for your nice review my friend.

[Frieda P]

What a quirky love poem, and makes perfect sense to me...'fruit flavored bologna', that was some love affair!

[willweb]

Yes it was. Thank you so much Frieda P. I am happy you liked this one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

stars collecting on door mats...oh yes...and fruit flavored bologna...all of that craziness making more sense than all of me...i've felt too crazy for others to love me...i know this feeling..

you really work words into a frenzy, will.

jacob

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Jacob

[s y e]

Being a relationship can be hard work but sometimes it can be quite challenging and annoying, things we love one minute, we hate the next. Ha, loved it Will.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

damn, that is so true, Noodle.

[s y e]

Thanks Jacob, I thought it was too.

[Rita L. Sev]

roots found solace on mountain tops... Great image here.

You paint the longing well, Will. Great write.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Rita. I am happy you liked this one.

[Orchid]

A sad twist at the end - the same as life sometimes. Well played!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Orchid for your nice comments. I am happy you enjoyed thi one.

[J. K. Beach]

Like Shirlena, I thought things were on a good roll, then--BAM! You broke our hearts... well done! It made the piece more powerful. Though, I was enjoying the word play immensely. Thanks for sharing this...

[willweb]

Thanks so very much J.K. for you nice comments. Sorry about the ending. :)

[Shirlena]

Aww and it was going so well and picturesque and imagine the bologna tasted like gummy bears-(love that) to cut up in slices and share until and sadly so many don't know what they have. I skipped through this poem until I got to the end. That hurt wil but it was good :).

[willweb]

Thank you so much Shirlena for you nice comments today. I am happy you enjoyed this.