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Chocolate covered ferry stops
in the guise of longing for love
Cars lined up in order of color,
drivers hang on railings
reaching for that offered hand
only to find they are pulled into the drink
by the one in the mini skirt
and low cut whispers
attracting the unsuspecting
Red lips smiling at the bodies
crying for help, pleading,
going down for the last time
And she uses going down for inspiration
in her next poetic landing
where more will be waiting for the
ride of...their life

What are waves for anyway?

Reviews

[Vidya Bacchus]

Awesome pen Will.I really enjoyed it :)

[willweb]

Thank you again Vidya for your always nice comments on my poetry. I am happy you enjoyed this.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Will :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Will :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Excellent metaphor - well done, Will!

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Rita.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Sounds like you have gained inspiration in the wave yourself....

This is an impassioned flare of words... her erotic art fuels your theme...

A ride like that is a rollercoaster many are willing to pay for just to feel something.

Captivating write!~xoxo~:)

[willweb]

Thank you so much Robbie for your nice comments today. I am thirlled you liked this one.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Nicely done... cleverly written. :)

[Matching Socks]

: ) enjoyed this one Will.
Thought provoking. :)

[willweb]

Thank you so much Ance.

[Sami Khalil]

Very metaphoric with inspiration for romantic landing...In my library...:)............

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Sami for your wonderful comments today. I am happy you enjoyed this.

[Sami Khalil]

I did. You are welcome....:)....

[Lyn Anderson]

That's a very interesting write. I love the imagery. One thing, you might want to switch longing for longed, in keeping with the present tense.

[willweb]

Thank you KLGoode. I will consider that change.

[MsJewel]

Love the metaphor in this clever little gem. Always a delight to read your poetry

:) Julie

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Julie for your nice comments. I am thrilled you liked it.

[Pryde Foltz]

Poetry as a romantic lure … I have yet to figure that one out. We do like to get caught up in the sensations of it, I guess. But I did get caught-up in the superb metaphor work here, willweb.

[willweb]

Thanks so much Pryde. Happy this one lured you in.

[s y e]

Holy cats Will, you blew me right off my seat with this one, this is so strong and powerful. I'm completing backing up what Jacob has said. Couldn't have said it better myself. The waves are for sure a cover for her deception... Nice!

[willweb]

Thank you so much Noodlehead for your comments. I am happy you enjoyed this one.