Return to Sender

Wrapped in plain brown paper

in a cardboard box

mailed postage due to someone who cared

 

A slight shake,

hearing the sound of rattling pieces

mixed in with tears, pain and sorrow

 

My hands found you,

broken and shattered

in the bin marked outgoing

 

Gently I opened you,

held you against my heart,

mending you the best that I could

 

But your happiness was elsewhere

in a worried smile addressed to another,

regardless of the fear

 

I repackaged you

and wrote “Return to Sender”,

then softly stamped, Fragile, Handle with Care”

 

Praying he will see

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

Lovely, you express bittersweet sentiments beautifully here, Will.

[willweb]

Thank you Rita for your nice comments today

[Frieda P]

Bittersweet metaphor, love how you wrapped it up in the end, muchly enjoyed....

[willweb]

Thank you so much Frieda P for your nice comments today. I am very happy you enjoyed my poem.

[just Penny]

I read this earlier when I chose to comment on your poem "Melted" but I came back to this one as it stirred something personal deep within me. It's quite beautiful but tragic. "Worried smile addressed to another" suggests to me that nothing is concrete but after "repackaging" was returned, honoring the choices made, whether positive or negative, whether comfortable or uncomfortable, perhaps borne out of obligation or loyalty, who knows? Love delayed, maybe indefinitely. Now that is sad. Yoi have great writing skills. Penny

[willweb]

Thank you Penny so very much for this nice comment on my poem and the wonderful compliment on my writing skills. I am so happy you enjoyed this one.

[MagicAl]

Oh I love this one so much! It's so sweet, in a heartbreaking kinda way! So powerful.. :)

[willweb]

Thank you MagicAl for your nice comments. I am happy you liked this one today.

[MagicAl]

You're wekllcome, i loved it! :)

[MagicAl]

*welcome...

[Einstein Noodle]

nurses are notorious for picking up broken packages and spending relationships on fixing .. always fixing .. smart smart man to ever so compassionately return to sender ... tho the sadness is poignant .. its the smartest thing to do ..
thoroughly enjoyed reading .. always glad to see you have posted something new .. really good use of metaphor!
E.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Einstein Noodle. I am happy you enjoyed this one. Your comments are very encouraging.

[Pryde Foltz]

Wrapped in plain brown paper
in a cardboard box
mailed postage due to someone who cared

A very poignant write, will web. Loved the metaphor exploration.

[willweb]

Pryde, I am happy you enjoyed this one. Thank you so much.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Aww so sad Will.Even if you love someone you have to let them go if their heart belongs to another even if that other person breaks them its their choice.

[willweb]

You are so correct Vidya. Thank you as always for your nice comments.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Will :)

[A. Amos]

Sharp and smart write my friend and always enjoy reading your work!

[willweb]

Thank you so much A. Amos. I am gald you enjoyed this one.

[A. Amos]

Pleasure my friend

[Matching Socks]

You are so clever and witty with each and every single poem.
And you always tug at my heart. Can't you just keep the package?
You should have told her there's a no return policy...

[willweb]

I tried, but you know woman, whn they make up their mind. Thanks Ance for you comments. I am really happy you enjoyed this.

[Matching Socks]

I love all of yours. I might just be your biggest fan. :)

[willweb]

That is a happy thing for me.