Spit shine

When is enough, enough?

When the bag breaks,

spilling its contents all over your

freshly cleaned pristine kitchen floor,

or does it just appear to be clean?

 

Paper towel wipe up,

maybe a quick mopping,

some pre-packaged liquid glow,

a strategically placed rug

that matches the curtains…sort of

 

Presentation of a shiny surface

for the book club, the poker gang

that is still covered with germs,

invisible dog prints, lost peas and carrots,

used dental floss along the floorboard

 

But still that helpless bag is filled beyond the brim,

10, 15, 20 pounds in a 5 pounder

More than it can hold, splitting at the seams

Until…well there it is, strewn in all directions,

listening to the cussing and complaining

 

thinking to itself…enough already

 

Reviews

[Sunny]

This is an interesting poem, and an interesting way to ask when enough is enough.

Would love to see a story inspired by this poem?

[willweb]

Thank you so very much for your comments today Sunny. I am glad you liked this.

[Sunny]

really I think you write maybe a short story from this poem! I would like to read it if you do. :)

[willweb]

I will keep that in mind. Maybe I will, if so I will let you know.

[Sunny]

Can''t wait. xD

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Sounds like all of trash cans over flowing because my child can't handle the one task that I gave her to do at our home....well done.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Josie for your comments today. That was funny.

[Vidya Bacchus]

I guess we all have to wonder when enough is enough.When has life thrown everything that it can at us when do we get to say "enough".Really thought provoking pen Will :)

[willweb]

Thank you so much for your comments today Vidya.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Will :)

[MsJewel]

Enough already! Love that ending.
and this verse is my favorite:
Paper towel wipe up,
maybe a quick mopping,
some pre-packaged liquid glow,
a strategically placed rug
that matches the curtains…sort of
I had to laugh when I read this verse as it is something I can relate to.
Your creativity shines my friend

:) Julie

[willweb]

Thank you so much Julie for your nice comments today. I am happy you enjoyed this.

[Pryde Foltz]

When is enough, enough?
When the bag breaks,
spilling its contents all over your
freshly cleaned pristine kitchen floor,
or does it just appear to be clean?

We can tear ourselves apart in pursuit of perfection. I think Betty Friedan would laud this one, as do I. Great, great write.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Pryde for commenting on my poem today. I am more than happy you enjoyed this.

[Lyn Anderson]

Indeed, when is full too full, enough, enough? -- this can apply to garbage bags and arguments, to toilets and husbands -- very universal appeal.:)

[willweb]

Thank you so much KLGoode for your comments today. This holds another meaning as well, I guess I didn't pull it of too well.

[Matching Socks]

Enough already...
I'm gonna burst!

Seriously though, great job.
Don't sweat the small stuff...

[willweb]

Thanks so much Ance.

[s y e]

Oh damn, this is raw and powerful and you make such a good point. Sometimes, fighting back isn't the answer and letting go is the best thing to do. I really loved the wording of this one, Will.

Enjoyed muchly!

[willweb]

Thank you so much Noodlehead for your comments today. I am glad you enjoyed this.