Fading away

There on a sleeping shorline

of uncounted sand and remnants of childhood castles

rested a single shell, its beauty beckoned

 

Opalescent glimmers

reflecting on discarded beer tabs

linked only by the memories they produced

 

Picking it up, it feels as smooth

as your skin on that hot summer day

when I last held you

 

Placing it to my ear

I can hear the rythym of a long forgotten song,

sung in distant melodies 

 

A perfect tempo,

like that of your pulse felt in that final kiss,

just before you walked away

 

I can still see those footprints,

as I realize this sound not heard since that day

is the echo of my heart beat, fading away

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[s y e]

Wow, bittersweet Will. This touched my heart. You're amazing.

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Noodlehead

[Chris Micha]

Great job here, Will. A very sad piece that you were able to tie into a beach seen. Great job!

[willweb]

I am glad you liked this Christian, thank you for your comments.

[Rita L. Sev]

Beautiful imagery in this melancholy piece, Will.

[willweb]

Thank you Rita. I am happy you liked this one.

[MsJewel]

Sad and yet so beautifully written. A gorgeous poem of lost love :) Julie

[willweb]

Thank you so very much Julie for commenting on my poem today. I am excited that you liked it.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is sad Will.Musings of a love gone.Excellent pen my friend :)

[willweb]

Thank you so much Vidya for making me smile this morning.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Glad to make you smile.You are welcome :)

[Jane Dougherty]

I do like this poem. Melancholy without drama.

[willweb]

Thank you so much Jane for your comments today.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Sad but written beautifully. Astounding lines...outstanding poetry!
Keep it up.

[willweb]

Thank you so much for your comments today Dhaye. I am glad you liked it.

[Shirlena]

This is so sweet with a foreboding trail before the end...I don't wish for fairytale endings in love, no such thing but I do wish a happier ending for this eloquent colloquy of words. This is breathtaking will.

[willweb]

Thank you again Shirlena for your nice comments.

[Shirlena]

it really is beautiful, ur welcomed.

[lissalovesyou]

Beautiful.
I love how you wrote about the shell.
Also,
"A perfect tempo,
like that of your pulse felt in that final kiss,
just before you walked away"
Heartbreaking.
lissalovesyou:)

[willweb]

Thank you again Lisa for your nice comments on my work. I am more than happy you liked this one.

[Matching Socks]

Seriously... These allergies are fricking killing me today.

: )

So beautiful, and heart breaking.
And the shell... What was once ALIVE in that shell. GONE.

[willweb]

I am sorry my allergic friend. :) Happy you liked this one today. Your comments are always a joy to read. Thank you so very much.