Broken moon

I've broken the moon

with a single glance

falling head first into the light

shattering all about me

fragments of what I thought was

stabbing like splinters

deep in my heart

where no light

shall shine again

Reviews

[s y e]

Woah... This is deep and dark. I love it! I love it when poetry is powerful it's like you can see a movie playing on your screen just by reading your words! Amazing.

[willweb]

Thank you Noodlehead for reading my poem. I am glad you liked it.

[Aethereal]

I enjoyed the imagery within this poem. Moonbeams morph into shattered amber crystals resulting in eternal darkness.

[willweb]

Thank you Aethereal for your comments on my poem today.

[Aethereal]

You're welcome! You say neither too little nor too much in your free verse poems. Occam's razor is applied throughout.

[Ben]

Reminds me of the chinese poem where the guys says

...after you, my heart leather, an inch thick

[willweb]

Thank you for reading my poem Ben

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Dark and deep...love the idea of falling onto the light of the moon and shattering it, such an original idea. The fragmented broken shards of light piercing your heart...wow. I really liked this. Good work.

[willweb]

Thank you for reading Kalypso.

[BlueZan]

This is beautiful. It's how I imagine falling stars must feel.

[willweb]

Thank you again for reading BlueZan.

[Crystal Ellyson]

I love this poem!!!! It is beautiful!!!! Great job

[willweb]

Thank you Crystal

[Crystal Ellyson]

Your Welcome.

[Shirlena]

Awww I know it's not as bad as that sweetie...is it? I hope not. I'm sure everyone is disappointed at some point at their not reaching certain goals. It just calls for a little redirecting because life will throw you a curb ball now but I recently heard a saying, "It's not how you start but how you finish". The day at over yet young man, "Billy Dee Williams". Brilliant, melancholy poem by the way.

[willweb]

Thank you Shirlena.

[Shirlena]

ur welcomed, enjoyed it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it is really tough to get to a point where we look at ourselves....deep into our hearts and say.."who is this person?"

really like the title also.

[willweb]

Thank you Jacob.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This was such a profound and thought provoking poem.Well written true :)

[willweb]

Thank you very much.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are very welcome :)