Broken moon

I've broken the moon

with a single glance

falling head first into the light

shattering all about me

fragments of what I thought was

stabbing like splinters

deep in my heart

where no light

shall shine again

Reviews

[light and ashes]

Keep your head up.

Who knows? ....Maybe this is your rebirth?
Use the muse and inspiration however you can to propel yourself forward.
That is what we all have to do in life.
People will just have to understand that.
You have a great writing here. I am a fan.

[willweb]

Thank you so much my friend.

[light and ashes]

You are so very welcome. I hope you find peace in your soul.

[Ruby]

Wow amazing . You write well

[willweb]

Thank you again Blue.

[Ruby]

XD welcome again :3

[wu]

I'm getting some Gordon Sumner vibes from your lyrics here. Partly Be Still My Beating Heart and partly Sister Moon. I've always loved this he told about the latter.
The singer recounted when he used Shakespeare to appease a staggering drunk one night who kept demanding to know "How beautiful is the moon?" He answered with a line from Sonnet #130: "My mistress's eyes are nothing like the sun." The inebriated man liked the answer and stumbled away into the night. Sting wrote: "Shakespeare is always useful, I've found, for calming down violent drunks, if only because it gives them the impression that you're crazier than they are."
https://www.songfacts.com/facts/sting/sister-moon

[willweb]

Thanks so much. Big Sting fan here so maybe he did have some influence.

[Sami Khalil]

Broken moon, broken dream, broken heart. This was sad in a way. Very well written...

[willweb]

Thanks again my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome WillWeb.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I have an intense fascination for the moon and for the clarity of self. This petite poem is an explosion! I feel darkness and angst but I also feel power and self-worth. We are all pieces of the perfect puzzle, some fit, some don't. This piece sparkles!

[willweb]

Thank you so much again for climbing all the way down into the bottom of my poetic barrel and pulling a few of these to the surface. Be careful though on this journey, there is no telling what you might find down there. : )

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I like to start from the beginning. Mine is the same way....all kinds in this mind of mine.lol

[willweb]

I guess we will see. : )

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Will,

It's quite difficult for a romantic poet of any note to pass on such a poignant title that hints at a dysfunctional moon.
Free Verse is one of my favorite forms, and yours certainly tells an emotional tale of angst and woe I'm certain too many of us will, unfortunately, relate to. Could use an edit with verses and punctuation for a more finished and appealing work … poems! Never finished.
Good thing about pity poetry is that we know broken hearts most always seem to find a way to mend.
I very much like the simplistic quality of your metaphor, imagery, spot-on linebreaks, and luring title.
Like the undulations of love and happiness, there's always better 'n worser days behind 'n ahead.

Good stuff, Will … thanks for the share! ⁓ Richard🖌

[willweb]

Thanks so much Richard. This was a long, long time ago and a heartbreak far away. : )

[Richard🖌]

Thank goodness, My Friend!
I've a good number, myself.🥂

[D. Mansfield]

Hard to top that, beautiful poetry!

[willweb]

I see you found a really old one. Thanks for searching. : )

[William Michael Reeves]

Nice start! Breaking the moon with a glance. I get the feeling some light has filtered back into your heart. I hope so. A dark heart pumps poison.

[willweb]

It is amazing what a few years will do. : ) I am good now and to be honest, I was probably good then just leaning on some past experiences to create some poetry. Thanks again for rummaging around in the old poetic attic. See, I have changed already, out of the sewers and into the attic. Next will probably be a show box in the closet. : )

[Coyote Poetry]

This is poetry my friend. No wasted word and no wasted thoughts. You create a vision of the broken moon and the darkness coming. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[willweb]

Thank you so very much. This was a first for me. : )

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend and the poetry was so good.

[keith]

going back to first write posted is where i head
it is usually a great introduction to one's writes
this is as one could say ... paydirt!

nothing compares with the deep effects of shattered love
it is often fatal never to be healed
this write has flow that reads aloud with ease

appreciate it

[willweb]

Thanks so much Keith. I barely remember this one though the feeling is still fresh on my mind.

[keith]

i am extex ... born in waco raised in the valley
where do you hang your hat?

[willweb]

The San Antonio area...a bit north, New Braunfels.

[keith]

ost ... the better part

[willweb]

It is pretty nice here.

[keith]

too damn crowded for me
far eastern nc is my retreat