A letter

Just a short little piece trying to avoid form whilst staying minimalistic.

Every time
I try to write
You
A letter
I inherently want
To pour out
All the manners
In which you
Deconstructed me
Nine times
I tried
And counting
Each time retracing
Alternate spacing between
The same few words
You fucked me up.
But I appreciate that.
Earnestly
With utter absolution
You gave the ice
Something to kiss

Author's Note

One of the first from a while back, during a time when my style underwent a number of changes. It's a stark contrast to what I usually wrote so any advice would be appreciated.

Reviews

[LastMonth]

This is cool.
At first glance, my thought was down the lines of--
Is this a technical practice..? Is he trying out formats and styles? Brandishing his skills..?

But there's more to it. Isn't there?
I tried deconstructing it in my mind to better understand it,
But I found that I could not.

Honestly I've read it out loud six times by now, I reckon.
Perhap's I shouldn't, perhaps some things are better left simple, without looking too hard into it.

I'll point out that I like the format you used, it made it impossible not to say it out loud while reading it, I felt almost compulsed to do it.

Thank you for the read.

[Willis Walker]

This piece was using a more minimalist style, and playing with a feeling of deconstruction and the abstract. I leave out punctuation (except for certain sentences) as I like to encourage the reading out load and forming your own pace, and thus, your own interpretation (choosing which sentences you link and which you form separately). I shall be putting a few more abstract pieces on here now and then in among the more orthodox stuff that I right. (I find the minimal and abstract style of writing as a better form of my own expression, but I understand it is not to everyone's liking )

Thank you for reading my piece! :)

[Kenzie]

This poem is raw and I like that about it. You do a great job of saying what you need to say in a short manner. The only thing I might add is a little extra punctuation, although I understand that sometimes the beauty of poetry is leaving that out.

[Bear]

I love seeing a writer experiment with form and format, style and genre as it is a sign of growth. I also want to applaud you for getting your message across with so few words. I was never able to write in the minimalist style my family and friends would tell you my head would explode if is didn't say more than needed. I hope to read your efforts in other forms and formats as you exercise your writing skills :~)
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[Willis Walker]

Thank you very much for your kind words, they are very motivating. I haven't been on here in a long time but I plan to start using the site more often. Any further insights would be greatly appreciated and I will keep my eye out on my read request box as to return the favour. :)

-Willis

[Bear]

I tell everyone I can to take advantage of the two best writing tools I know of, the text to speech program which lets you hear your work as written (I personally use NaturalReader http://www.naturalreaders.com/index.html) and Grammarly https://app.grammarly.com Between these two writing tools you should be able to catch most wording issues by hearing them on your text to speech program and most technical issues with Grammarly. I don't normally send out read request, in fact, I have only sent out one and it was just to show people that I don't have to rhyme but thank you for the consideration :~)

[Willis Walker]

Ah! Thank you very much for the tools. I wasn't even aware things like this existed, I will make sure to make good use of them. Well I will make sure to check in whenever I'm on, as I'm always interested in seeing the work of others. :)

-Willis

[Bear]

I should also give you the link to Word Hippo then and it may be the best site of its kind http://www.wordhippo.com/
It offers Word Meanings, Rhyming Words, Example Sentences, Translate, Find Words, Word Forms, Pronounce Words, Names and more.

[Willis Walker]

Ah I will definitely keep that in mind. Thank you very much for providing the resources, it is very much appreciated! :)

[Bear]

It seems silly now to give the link to my lessons of poetry page where I have the links posted that I have already sent you but there some other links and some helpful information so http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/BearMage/1501893/