Whispers

One of my best friends passed away recently and here are my thoughts.

In the quietest moments of the morning -

I hear the whispers of the souls that have passed

Throughout my life and beyond even my deepest memories -

I pay tribute to them as they hover in the windows of my soul.

My visions of them are clearer than when they once existed -

Their smiles and their words embedded in my mind -

A celebration of the lives that once graced my world -

Never-ending love when all other emotions seem lost to me.

I quietly remember the sweet smiles in their eyes -

A moment in time,

Never to be forgotten,

Or forsaken -

Across the dreamscape where memories are seldom lost -

Uniting as one…

 ...Forever.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. The flow of thoughts about the missed friend and the desire to meet up again one day. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[J. J. Nightingale]

WELL .. I DISAGREE WITH THE BELOW WORDS .. . I WOULD NOT DARE TO CHANGE A THING HERE .. THIS IS A MOST SPECIAL WRITE .. AND I CAN RELATE TO YOUR TOUCHING, AND LOVING THOUGHTS .. I SEE MANY SMILES IN MY MEMORY , AND A FEW HAVE GOT ME THROUGH MY DAY .. AND A FEW MY NIGHTS .. AND I SMILE, BECAUSE THEY LIVED, AND STILL LIVE, IN MY HEART OF HEARTS ...

SPECIAL WRITE ... JASMINE

[xx]

I enjoyed reading this! In terms of any tweaking you might do, I agree with the advice of the reviewer below me, who suggested the bit with the use of the ellipsis and a new line.

I loved your choice of diction in this poem, and I'll admit - I have great difficulty reading poems with awkward wording and such. I had no such difficulty reading this poem, though - I thoroughly enjoyed reading it from start to finish. There's a wistful tone that prevails throughout, and I could easily grasp it even before I read your note on what inspired this piece - bravo! You clearly communicated your feelings, and all readers will appreciate this piece. Keep writing! And I offer you my deepest sympathies for your loss.

-Mina

[HaruHau-Chan]

The absolute best poem I've read tonight.
The only suggestion I can make for you is that you take out all of the .......'s in the last line and separate the forever from it like this:
Uniting as one...
...Forever

The way it is now, the ....'s are sepparating the two words are actually a bit distracting and take away from that last dramatic point of the poem.

But otherwise, this is wonderful!