He who loses

So, i was bored in class and made this.

"Oh how gracefully fate moves,
Through the lives of every mortal
They search for her great truths,
But their hopes for them crumble

The lives of man are intertwined,
With every soul who lives on earth
Fate sees it like a great outline,
Judging every man’s worth

But she sees me in a different way,
Wondering “what of the path he chooses?”
Only I am a man of a different day.
I am he who loses"

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Και ο Όμηρος έδωσε τη μούσα της έμπνευσης

[William Evictus]

I'm fairly certain this is Greek, I recognize the symbols

[Meraki]

So beautifully written, and you were bored at the time. I connected with this in way that I felt, what I assume, the narrator felt. You sir have talent! And I as a stranger would like to be your friend, because I am weird.

[Meraki]

Oh.. that sounded less awkward in my head heh, sorry..

[William Evictus]

Do not fret, i enjoy the weird :D

[Brittany Zedalis]

Nice rhyming style here. I like it.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Welcome to the cafe! I really liked this piece. Very deep, and I got a dark, smokey imagery from it. Very good flow. Nicely done!