So Long And Goodnight

I'm never going to see you again..

So long and goodnight,

Never will I see you again,

Unless you tell me to stay,

I've been feeling unwelcome,

A lot more recently,

It's seemed like you've been,

Really distant the past few weeks,

Unless you do something about it,

So long and goodnight

Author's Note

Made this while listening to Green Day's "Helena". Hope you enjoyed. Please review! Thanks..
-Willa

Reviews

[Phillitup]

I'm telling you, right now, to stay. Oh my gosh, I'm gonna cry. Willa, I don't think you really know. I don't think you know how much you mean to me.

[Savior of Time]

It's not based off of anyone. Please.. don't.. Philby, it's fine. I'm fine. Nothing wrong's right now. No one comes to mind when I read this. No one came to mind when I wrote it. Everything's fine.

-Willa

[Phillitup]

Good

[Savior of Time]

It's okay.

-Willa

[Riley Bray]

This one, I really, really like. Its very remorseful yet also very pretty. I think you did an awesome job with this, although maybe you could use rhyme scheme? Again, loving this one!

[Riley Bray]

Oh, also, you don't need to use a comma just because its the end of the line. I'd say the only lines that need commas are the seventh one and the eighth one. There should be a period after the first one, the third one, the fifth one, and then there should be the word and in front of unless. (Or at least that's how it seems to me, because then punctuation is correct and it keeps the flow). Outstanding job on this one Willa!

[Savior of Time]

I like commas and I just think it looks wrongs without them. On some, I don't have any punctuation, so yeah. Thanks for the review. I sometimes rhyme on my poems, but for some reason I just can't seem to get the rhymes anymore.. :/ Weird, right?

-Willa

[Riley Bray]

Haha I see and okay. That is weird, I wonder why. xD

[Savior of Time]

Yerp. I know right? I just made one rhyming, surprisingly.. Bout to post it after I read "Raven Girl"

[Riley Bray]

Cool! I'll read it and thanks. xP

[Savior of Time]

You're welcome :3