AAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!! So AWESOME! I wasn't allowed to wear makeup until I was 15, and now I'm 16 and I still don't wear it! xD It's so much trouble and I'm just like, "Girl you pretty anyways." SO yeah, your poem. It's perfect and wonderful and amazing. I enjoyed it. The colors were also very nice. My favorite line was, "'Cover' is right there, in burning flames," I was just blown away. It's amazing. Girls don't need makeup and I agree with you whole heartedly! We don't need to hide who we really are!
Thank you! I think that was my favorite line in it, too. I mean, SOME makeup is okay, but you don't .. read moreThank you! I think that was my favorite line in it, too. I mean, SOME makeup is okay, but you don't need to have a lot. People need to show their real colors. :)
Hahaha.
I love my makeup and my pearls. I like painting my face in sparkling shades that subtly go with my outfit. I really, really love my pearls. They were once my grandmother's. My grandfather gave them to her as an anniversary gift, I think, some 50 years ago by now. The pearls always make me feel... I don't know... And the red lipstick too, makes me feel old-fashioned and fancy!
i do not understand the reference to the greens.
And neons, going to insult those too? Neon green and the hottest of pinks, make me so happy! I love to play with colors. I like the attention. I won't deny it, when I walk into the room full of gray drab and beige when I shimmer and sparkle and reflect and nearly glow.
I think think you have attacked the wrong here. Now, I don't read those damn magazines. They're boring as hell, but the advertisements... I love those! And the spreads showing dramatic elements of fashion, not the ones with celebrities, I skip those. But don't you see, painting up yourself like that is an act of art! It has nothing to do with beauty.
" Your beauty is there and every see it too,
Yes every,.."- everybody would prob work better.
The poem is well written, I'll give you that, for sure, I just can't get on board with the content.
Aww! You make me feel bad! It was only supposed to be about young girls who are insecure about thems.. read moreAww! You make me feel bad! It was only supposed to be about young girls who are insecure about themselves! It's only supposed to make them feel good about themselves! I feel bad now.....I'm sorry! I didn't mean to offend you! Please forgive me!
11 Years Ago
Oh dear! I am not offended and I didn't really mean to make you feel bad. I was only trying to make .. read moreOh dear! I am not offended and I didn't really mean to make you feel bad. I was only trying to make the point that perhaps you were attacking the wrong things. I don't think any of those things make girls feel bad about themselves... the blame for that, in my opinion lies elsewhere. You write wonderfully, I just can't seem to leave my damn soapbox at home!
11 Years Ago
Oh, thank goodness! Thank you for clearing that up and for the help! I'll make sure to look at these.. read moreOh, thank goodness! Thank you for clearing that up and for the help! I'll make sure to look at these in a different perspective next time. Thank you!
Its a great message for girls everywhere. The pressures to be "beautiful" in todays society can really damage a persons perception of themself.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you Riley! Many more people need to be less insecure about themselves and how they look. Every.. read moreThank you Riley! Many more people need to be less insecure about themselves and how they look. Everyone is beautiful, no matter what anyone says. It really shouldn't bring them down, but it does. I have experience, it's still going on, but I'm getting used to thinking I'm pretty. I still don't think I am, but whatever. Point is, thanks!
Your talent is evident now and can be seen in this earlier poem too. Maybe not absolutely perfectly worded but such a great job done of conveying the message you wanted too. You can always refine the good work some more...I wish I was a hundredth as talented as you at 12. Would have been somewhere good today! Thank you for sharing!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you so much! I made this one last year, when I was eleven (but I was nearly twelve. Point is, .. read moreThank you so much! I made this one last year, when I was eleven (but I was nearly twelve. Point is, I didn't have as much knowledge as I do now.) That really means a lot to me. I've never thought of myself as talented at anything. Thank you!
A fine commentary on modern society. I do not think it is really as bad for everyone as the poem pertrays it though. I like "girls" that take the time to look good... Still, too many of us have low self exteem and take measures to extreems and let ourselves be taken advantage of. The monster is not Covergirl. It is the mind of the individual that take matters out of perspective.
Good write.
This is really good. would love to read more from you. Your talent is no joke. Your really good at writing. Keep it up.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks so much! I've never thought of myself as a good writer or a person with talent, itself. If yo.. read moreThanks so much! I've never thought of myself as a good writer or a person with talent, itself. If you don't believe me, ask phillitup. But anyway, thanks. :)
11 Years Ago
No problem. But your talent is amazing. You need to start believing it. :) wish you the best
-.. read moreNo problem. But your talent is amazing. You need to start believing it. :) wish you the best
-nunya-
11 Years Ago
Ha, thanks. I'll try to believe. Believing is the first step. :P
Yes it is. Now don't go to take it and fall down. Your not 2 your 12 or 13. Believe take that step a.. read moreYes it is. Now don't go to take it and fall down. Your not 2 your 12 or 13. Believe take that step and make it big. :)
11 Years Ago
Haha, yeah, I'm not two anymore. I am twelve, by the way. I will believe and keep writing! :D I'm wo.. read moreHaha, yeah, I'm not two anymore. I am twelve, by the way. I will believe and keep writing! :D I'm working on one right now, actually!
I remember when you wrote this Tree. I was impressed then, and I still am.
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Thanks Philby. I made it for you guys, and especially Wanda.
11 Years Ago
:)
11 Years Ago
Phillitup thank you for requesting me to read this. Its a really great poem! I could say a whole lot.. read morePhillitup thank you for requesting me to read this. Its a really great poem! I could say a whole lot more, but it would fill many paragraphs.:)
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