Still my Heart oh Sweet Desire

A short sonnet-about a lovers glance across a crowded room (or is it?)

Still my heart oh Sweet Desire

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Still my heart oh sweet desire

On crescent moon once passed

To hold thee tender in a moments grace

With others whom you may transpire

Concede not my wistful glance

For upon thee it choose to stay

Now in my dreams thus torment flows

Must Perpetuate my love to chance

Hath thou indulged my looks return

Or banished thoughts not gracious

Or worthy not concedes thy mind

An eternity I must endure to learn

That heavens glimpse to render seek

Momentarily lacks devoid behold

Then in a smile thy passion moves me

And courage lets my body speak

A sonnet By Will Neill-2013.

Author's Note

I wrote this because I wanted to see what it would be like to copy Shakespear.
If you like it great if not well thats ok too. I am going to make this my last post for a while so I will be calling by from time to time only to reveiw.
Will

Reviews

[Jack...]

Well...they used to call me the romantic poet around here...my friend the throne is yours. Very nicely penned and very romantic.

[Will Neill]

No way Jack, I am more of a story teller, I am happy to let you be the romantic poet. Thanks for the read.
Take Care
Will

[Frieda P]

I think old Will would approve, I like the way you spun this one in his fashion.

[Will Neill]

Frieda, Thank you so much for enjoying my sonnet. I look forward to returning the read.
Will

[Lydia Shutter]

You have emulated Shakespeare well. Lovely sonnet here. Lydi**

[Will Neill]

Lydia, Thank you for taking the time to read my sonnet, I hope you are well.
Will

[Rose of many colours]

Hi Will, this is very good, I read some of Shakespear own poems and they are world class, even though I am not one of those that so eloquently quote him from time to time, I wouldn't mind a refresher course, thank you for this open door..

[Will Neill]

Rose,thank you for your kind comment, I could never walk in his shoes, his work is profound.
kind Regards
Will

[Rose of many colours]

Very humble Will. I am sure Shakespear was as well...Keep writing Friend see you in the near future...

[Sami Khalil]

I felt as if Shaespeare was alive and well in your wonderful poem...:)

[Will Neill]

Sami, I feel humbled. Thank you.
Will

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[SyberRose]

Beautifully penned with the ink of romance...Rose

[Will Neill]

Rose,Thank you for your kind words.
Will

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I really admire poets who can write sonnets. I have tried once but it doesn't work...I have to study more about sonnets.
Going back to the theme, I like this one.I remember a romantic movie about two persons in a hall for a socialization...through glances and smiles, they became friends and then later more than that.

Nice presentation.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

This is done...in his style...the flow is there and the read is not hindered in the lines...I use to do sonnets all the time...but now that I found my style...I have abandon it completely...

[Angi]

This was very well done, Will! I am sad to see you won't be posting for awhile. I do understand, though. Please don't stay away for long! Angi~

[Will Neill]

Thanks Angi, glad you liked it-keep sending me R.R I will still review as I float by.
Will

[Traci]

Very nicely done, Will. I enjoyed it, and I'd say your attempt was a success. Hope to see you back soon :)

[Will Neill]

Traci, Thanks for your review, I will stop by and have a read now and then.
Will