Still my Heart oh Sweet Desire

A short sonnet-about a lovers glance across a crowded room (or is it?)

Still my heart oh Sweet Desire

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Still my heart oh sweet desire

On crescent moon once passed

To hold thee tender in a moments grace

With others whom you may transpire

Concede not my wistful glance

For upon thee it choose to stay

Now in my dreams thus torment flows

Must Perpetuate my love to chance

Hath thou indulged my looks return

Or banished thoughts not gracious

Or worthy not concedes thy mind

An eternity I must endure to learn

That heavens glimpse to render seek

Momentarily lacks devoid behold

Then in a smile thy passion moves me

And courage lets my body speak

A sonnet By Will Neill-2013.

Author's Note

I wrote this because I wanted to see what it would be like to copy Shakespear.
If you like it great if not well thats ok too. I am going to make this my last post for a while so I will be calling by from time to time only to reveiw.
Will

Reviews

[Woody]

I like thy eloquent pen, Bard Will. nicely crafted piece.

[Will Neill]

Engluva, I am humbled to be compared to Shakespeare.
Thank you
Will

[JenniferMarie]

So lovely, this sonnet. Tender, grace and love.

"Still my heart oh sweet desire"

"Then in smile thy passion moves me
and courage lets my body speak"

Very nice. Thank you for sharing.

[Will Neill]

Jennifer, I am sorry it took so long to thank you for your review.
Will

[Eva]

It's very beautifully written. Definitely feels like reading shakespeare.

[Will Neill]

Eva,I am sorry it took so long to thank you. I am glad you enjoyed reading.
Will

[Nicole Williams]

"concede not my wistful glance,
for upon thee it choose to stay"
This is beautifully written
You've done the style great justice

[Will Neill]

Thank you Kora, I am glad you liked my stab at Shakespear.
Will

[MOON]

Beautifully penned olde world, like the tone and quite romantic.

[Will Neill]

Thank you moon for taking the time to read and review.
Will

[David Scott]

I enjoyed the Shakespearian feel of your poem.
Desire has never stilled my heart... Oh, that it would still so my voice could claim, "And courage lets my body speak".
Wonderful conveyance of emotion Will.

[Will Neill]

David once again thank you.
dia do theaghlach.
Will

[Great Aunt Astri]

Wonderfu! My imagination went wild! Brilliant format too!

[Great Aunt Astri]

PS What type of sonnet is this .. not English, not Italian... I thought all sonnets had to have only 14 lines. A new type sonnet, maybe.

[Will Neill]

My Type-show you how much I know about poems-Ha!
Thanks Aunt.
Will

[Yellow Butterfly]

A wonderful and enchanting poem Will

Beautifully penned...

YB

[Will Neill]

Butterfly. Once again thank you. I will continue to read your work, I find it refreshing.
Will

[Yellow Butterfly]

Thank you..... I am becoming a fan of your work too... thank you for the friends add... :O)

[Will Neill]

My pleasure.
Will

[MsJewel]

I love the classic feel to this lovely poem. You did a great job with this style. I enjoyed it very much.
:) Julie

[Will Neill]

Julie, thank you for taking the time to look at my poem/sonnet.
Take care
Will

[Dean]

Not exactly a sonnet, but well expressed. Personally, I think adopting Elizabethan language does not ring true. but if you are comfortable in it, you have the right. I'm off to look at more of your work.